vibrant thang

a woman I can't compete with

veteran grown

I should be a big girl now

finally confronting impurities and fantasia

because being the latter she is also a flawless label

to my chagrin you are a regular to the end

cha-eezing without being phased

no matter how many times I’ve turned... reprise

tried to wipe my eye’s…there is no going somewhere

not for you... onward sultry windstorm

I believe you are here to malaise

but no shade sweetheart to you

using what God gave you to use

smile startling wide shaped perfectly banana

no parts and toothy

holding your hands and fingers as if charmed schooled

I’ll bet that’s natural and speaking of

how you get your toes to rule with feets supple

infallible… plain the arrogance you exude

look at God, look at his work, look at his creature

well…look at beauty

pressed taking a seat in the middle…under awning

from you

 

collecting self adjusting to why there is small blame

why he is out of range

pulchritudinous thang

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Ivory]

Loved the flow and the word play. This would be tight spoken out loud. Very good ; )

[Lyn Anderson]

Gotta be one of my favourite words EVER right up there with euphemisms and anachronisms -- very nice write this one, as they always are, giving pause for thinking. One minor point, not sure eyes requires the apostrophe in this case.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Depth and flow in this write...
grabs you and gives you quite a spectrum ---
yet the ending sums everything together...

[Shirlena]

That was quick Glen, thank you so much for giving my words a look so quickly and the content of your review...so gracious. Thanks again.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Oh...that was 10 hours ago...you're welcome...

[Shirlena]

Quick enough for me though -smile

[Frieda P]

What's that old commercial, think it was the 80's , 'don't hate because I'm beautiful'....ha brought that to mind. Killer ending, that's money!

[Cory Barrett]

Pulrchritudinous... really.... you are a whole other level of cool.

[WritersRankings]

This is top notch writing!

[willweb]

This was very fun to read Shirlena, but just remember one thing, I'll bet she can't write poetry. We all have something and it is ours to use as we decide. Your words are very beautiful, with or without make up.

[Shirlena]

Thanks wilweb but I wasn't putting myself down...you see the picture up in the corner on my page? That is me and I'm pretty enough but I also like giving credit where credit is due -smile but still, thank you so much for saying my words are beautiful.

[willweb]

My original thought was to tell you how beautiful you were, but I didn't want to be to forward. :)

[Shirlena]

Aww, now that was really sweet. Thank you very much wil :)