everything must dissipate…convincing self

when he's gone

won’t be sitting orange electric

watching  “The Last Dragon” no more

one of your favorites thangs especially Vanity singing

while alarms of sensibility clangs getting on my nerves

needling vision to restore... indulging my brood

don’t want to sow seeds that lead down ravines of self pity

waiting for that serving to grow cold

right now things still percolatin’ weighing metal on mind

as for the heart… it laments overtime…I need to scribble in it’s occupancy

return S upon the vest…shouldna never released the girl

who bestowed  this honor in the first place

won’t be listening to beloved jazz... alternative r&b

classical  we shall become reacquainted

resist the welcome to sorrow in your absence

pleading my presence… will learn to hate you as I love you so much

everything must dissipate (love you so much)

 

incidentally… not everything

 

 

 

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

don’t want to sow seeds that lead down ravines of self pity
yes, love that line. things we plant that take root and grow - our words are the most tenacious.

[Shirlena]

Thank you and yes I agree that are words can persist and linger. Thank you again for reading TL Boehm.

[Wuji]

You pen a sleepy velvet diction, and sometimes being surprised is more important that it being pop-poetry worthy. It pleases me very much to read your words, like an instrument that is not well known, an oboe perhaps.

The worst poets are the unoriginal ones, and that can never be said of you. And for my ear, that is more than enough for me. Some lines are quite genius like:

resist the welcome to sorrow in your absence

[Shirlena]

You know if I was the type my head would be too big to fit through the door after hearing grand compliments like this coming from you, whom I'm looking to start writing something new and is one of the most brilliant writer's up in this piece! Thank you Wuji...I'm hand over my heart honored.

[kublakhan27]

Add me to the list of those who were blown away by the ending...so many emotions at play in those lines. We try so hard to move on from lost loves, and we try so hard to convince ourselves that their loss will not infringe upon our future contentment...then we come across one innocent idiosyncrasy that reminds us of that loss, and we are instantly transported back to the painful realization of its end. I don't know, that's what this poem says to me, hopefully I'm not too far off the mark haha I'm very much in melancholy mode these days and these are the types of poems that are speaking to me the loudest...great work my friend.

[Shirlena]

Awww it's such a privilege to feel that my poems may lift you from your funk...I know that good poems have the same effect on me as well Kub...which means I get the same charge reading yours which I'm going to do now...Thank you sweetie.

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure Shirlena, and thank you :)

[FlamingPhoenix]

"don’t want to sow seeds that lead down ravines of self pity"--nicely done. I enjoyed the read. You can think KL for my visit.

[Shirlena]

I'll do that...thank for reading FlamingPhoenix.

[Kai Rollins]

I really love your style. The metaphor

"waiting for that serving to grow cold"

Hits home. Marvelous

[Shirlena]

Thank you so much Kai... appreciate the supportive review.

[Sami Khalil]

You are brilliant indeed. I must add my voice to the singing. Excellent...:)....................

[Shirlena]

I'm glad you think so Sam...I am pretty flattered that you do so or you :).

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)................

[Madalyn Beck]

Brilliant piece of work you have written! The ending really hit it home. Fantastic! I'm glad KL sent me this way! :)

[Shirlena]

Thank you so much...fortunate for me you value KL's opinion :)

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

Shirlena this quite amazing. Your use of metaphors "waiting for that serving to grow cold
right now things still percolatin’ weighing metal on mind" is wonderful

[Shirlena]

Thank you Anne...I'm honored that you thought enough to read a piece of my work.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Wow, this is just...amazing. I can't even think of a word to do it justice. Really wonderful job.

[Shirlena]

Thanks Brittany...I think what you didn't say you made up with what you did :).

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the journey in the poem.
"pleading my presence… will learn to hate you as I love you so much
everything must dissipate (love you so much)"
The above lines stood out. When the love is gone. Rarely can be found again. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Shirlena]

The funny thing is it lasted a while and even when I bowed out it hung on some-smile. Thank you so much for returning the favorite Coyote.