understand...I'mma MAN baby

Don't ask...don't tell but then maybe I should tell something. There is a very complex condition among black culture discussed recently on the radio...it inspired this write.

masked but in the atmosphere there is sadness

poised, while malfunctioning there is unrequited passion

exasperated you know and there is the need for restitution

but it want be so...it will take a portent of God before I know

how sweet it was like blackbirds captured formation

in uniform the key unlocking the pelted down

on the seed that blossomed the glimpse of reverberation

reason the mirror can't squeak too clean

minimized to digest from that which

I was ripped.. mama that raggedy scarf

damned that knotted head... grease hangs

hesitates central brow

this is the way sister learned how

scrunched down watching matronly bow

seeing disdain tick in the seconds of my scowl

indelible upon my expression

but mama I'M A MANE (man)

cognizant she will never measure expectation

futility is the libation of this confounded frustration

perpetuated DNA , CURSE MY SIGHT

yonder there oasis furls of satin

an appearance to rival eyes verdant in hues

a voice that rings like belles spared of tarnish

unlike the endured

and disgust is heavy but MAMA PLEASE UNDERSTAND...or not

wearing upon the already spent

the denied has become as tired of me as I am

kindred do ignore these steps but listen... I'M A MAN

leave me to this illest magnet

my consequences to dwell

I'm a man baby...I'M A MANE (man)

Reviews

[David Scott]

A man or a "man baby", or a man, baby... ? Yes, this is the question. culture plays an interesting role in our social maturity.
A very interesting write and one every man should read even if he does not quite understand it yet. Maybe it would spark something.
Socially poignant write!

[Shirlena]

Thanks for reading David, this is pretty deep, so much so that black people don't even want to understand it or should I say deal with it...it's too painful. So yes, it would be good if all man read it but in this case it would be more important if it was understood and then addressed. A great deal of emotional work would be involved and if the people who it effects directly aren't having much success at it then...

[David Scott]

Yes, I understand a little bit how this cultural norm permeates the black communities. Very deep and far reaching implications here.
All you can do is voice the concern and shine a light. In America the black community has seen sweeping changes at one time or another. There is no reason to believe things will never change. Yet at some point, there has to be accountability to the real issues and a determination by strong leadership to affect change in the day to day lives of the individuals within a given community. Do not despair. Let your light shine!

[Shirlena]

Thanks for the kinds words David. It is an interesting subject for me to tackle in writing and the chance to speak on something close to me :).

[Lloyd Frieson-Small]

This piece seems to stem from both personal experience and a playfulness when it comes to the wordplay. I feel as if you stepped outside of your comfort zone and let the emotions of the past flow freely. Excellent job, and an A+ for effort..
;)

[Shirlena]

Let's just say this is an experience I'm aware of and have experienced more so indirectly. This maybe more of a condition or state of mind. Thanks for the A OC :).

[m.s.early]

Very heavy. Weighty. Richly ethnic.
There appear to be some distracting typos, but otherwise an extremely profound write

[Shirlena]

Oh so this how you gonna do me after I've been so nice to you x? You do know this site automatically places red lines if you're writing is incorrect so when there is a red line I correct and when there isn't I don't besides, I've been over this write a couple of times so I'm sorry if you find the writing is off in some way but I am grateful for the parts that weren't for you. Thanks for reading friend.

[Lyn Anderson]

Brilliant. Glad I stopped by.

[Shirlena]

Thank you KL.