special... something very special

you're appearing essentially proper

I repeat pretending slight... not to raise a hair

it's not simple but everything is in place

quickly a vision leaning towards habitual

so pretty and you are man

you know that you are...both man and pretty

perfect for me to vanish while being able to peer

as an object less detectable

for the moment I am a cloud

of admiration of the sensation

spectator of his fist supporting his jaw

similar to photos of Amiri Baracka wondering...

how's he going to get these people to derive the purpose

of his written candor

I'm just lavishing

I'm just pondering

not ready to pledge devotion

I'll keep tact of any emotion

been no greeting cept by eye

Reviews

[WritersRankings]

Exceedingly artistic, the shorter lines give a different kind of power. All in the mo-jo of impressionism and go-betweens. The muse of sight and sight of muse, all in the infatuation of the moment, a universal human experience.

[Shirlena]

Yes it is true...I love writing about love. It is most human :). Thanks Wuj

[Blue]

"I'm just lavishing
I'm just pondering
not ready to pledge devotion
I'll keep tact of any emotion

been no greeting cept by eye"

Strong lines Shirlena. And I agree with Robby. You are "refreshingly original".

[Shirlena]

I'm flattered Arzel...thank you.

[Frieda P]

Sometimes that fantasy in our mind is what we crave, keeping that image intact and never having to risk real emotional connections. Love that you included Amiri Baracka here, too bad he's gone, a nice nod to him.

[Shirlena]

Thanks Frieda (sorry for the belated response).

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Your work is so refreshingly original. You have not a hint of copycat-ing about you. All your work has its own flow and its own language, and you choose very unique topics. For example, you show us here the secret admiration for a handsome beauty of a man. This is an all to UNcommon topic. Far too common is the praise of beautiful women, but this is not only a fine way to appreciate a man, but a fine description of a specific kind of feeling of love. This hiding while admiring. A few of us know it too...I love how you give us a very short snippet of time. It is a first feeling of care for someone, but with all the newness still keeping you uncertain. Questioning yourself. Great words and great exploration of a great topic!!

[Shirlena]

I have to do something for the men...and I have man appreciation at least once a week in my writings :). Thanks Robby I'm honored that you took the time to provide such a complimentary review.

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Hooray for male appreciation!!! We may act tough, but none of the men I know mine being described in loving terms as sexy and attractive. It just is so rarely done well, women keep it to themselves or don't do it at all. I don't think it is needy to want to be thought of as having the ability to possess beauty as a male, and to have that celebrated. Thank you for doing that!! The men I know are grateful! Also, you better believe I will give you a fine review when you put out fine work! You deserve it!!

[Shirlena]

Aww, thank you so much Robby.

[Sami Khalil]

"for the moment I am a cloud

of admiration of the sensation"

You are candor in your emotions in proper times and places. Your habit is to lavish the reader with good poetry...:)............

[Shirlena]

I try Sami if I can for the people ; ). Thank you... that is such a sweet commentary.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).........................

[1]

Nothing like expressing your true emotions; You clearly did that here! I'm sure we all can remember our first crush............. Enjoyed it immensely! Thanks for sharing your feelings!

[Shirlena]

Thank you for being kind enough to return the favor. Honey I have had so many first crushes and probably written about all of them :).