Hurricane

Inspired by Sandy

'Twas just one day 
Before Halloween
With a storm in a sky painted grey;

When a girl of ten
Walked out into the rain
With her hat nearly blowing away.

And the wind blew her coat
And the rain hit her face
And the cold freezing her to the bone;

But she smiled and sang
And she danced in the rain
Even though she was cold and alone.

And she didn't have reason
She didn't have rhyme
She didn't get cold or complain;

The storm only got worse
Like a terrible curse
But she danced with the wind and the rain

And her jacket was torn
Her feet shoeless and bare
And her hat had by now blown away;

And the wind was now howling
The weather was scowling
From the sky that was painted dark grey.

And the girl kept on dancing
The rocks catching her feet
But the cold had caused them to go numb;

And the cold stayed the same
The wind wracked her thin frame
And the rain beat her face like a drum.

And the very next day
There wasn't a sign
Of the girl who was dancing before.

She'd been blown away
By the wind and the rain
With a hat keeping her place on the floor.

Author's Note

Critiques please? I'd like to know what you think.

Reviews

[simplisticisms]

I loved it! It was catchy, easy to read, and creates an intense image in your head while reading. Powerful statement.

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WOW this is amazing, love the flow of this piece.
I can feel the emotions through out

[All The Same]

Thank you so much. :)

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Wow. this blew me away (no pun intended). i like the image it creates. it's very bold and realistic as to what is going on now. best wishes if this storm affects you.

[All The Same]

Thanks a lot. I actually wasn't too affected by the storm, and quite enjoyed the bad weather, but thanks.