The embers burn away the pain

We sit in this house
Within its walls we tell tales
Tales of mischief and joy
But now it is the end of all the peace and love

I'm leaving now,
I need to escape,
Why won't you come with me?

I need you
I bleed for you
I've lost all control
I don't know how i'll cope without you

I'll have just another shot of whiskey,
As I sit alone with a glass,
Filled with ice,
And liquid love...

Then I sit and conjure fire
I light the devils torch
i inhale the smoke of eternity
For I shall live forever...

Alone...

Reviews

[DearSweetAgony]

I disagree with Freelancejouster, I actually liked this poem. I've never heard of the metaphors that you used, but I understood them perfectly. Such as the "liquid love" and the "devils torch" parts. Which in meaning that your addictions are the only things that will love you and will stay. Maybe, because, in the beginning of your poem you are saying that the person that you love will not stay; unlike the "devils torch" or the "liquid love". Basically, what I'm saying is that I liked this poem, and I'm not saying that 'just because', I actually liked this in particular write. Great job, I really liked this one.

[Mockingbird]

very conversational yet exceptionally poetic. it sounds like there's much despair. i enjoyed your poem.

[Liza]

intense longing to want but not need - i relate to the feeling of wanting to be needed but not needing to feel needed. thought provoking imagery tying into emotions looking for relief

[freelancejouster]

ellipses are not your friends and your metaphors are a bit outdated. once again, we get a poem from you about dark things and sadness. perhaps you're lonely because that's what you focus on?

[Coyote Poetry]

A poem with a sad tale. When we have liquid love and loneliness. Just waiting for death to come. I like the ending to the excellent poem.
"i inhale the smoke of eternity
For I shall live forever...

Alone..."
Coyote

[SilentDreamer]

Oh how sad. Very nicely written. During the first stanza, last line, the words: "But now it is the end of all peace and love", make you wonder what happened. Which is good, it adds mystery. An enjoyable read.

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

it's an amazing poem, full of great dreams yet sadness, never thought they would mix but you've done it very well, i love the questions you ask, it's like you ask them but hear no answer, well, the answer is also only ever gonna be a wish, hope, dream... until it is possible x

[Calypso]

From the end of the poem I'm guessing the guy was turned down and now is upset of it. This could become a whole story.

[Lily Mae]

"Then I sit and conjure fire
I light the devils torch
i inhale the smoke of eternity
For I shall live forever...Alone"

Great write.. I love it all..
"Filled with ice and liquid love"...love it!!!

[Aidz]

4th stanza is wickedly kewl...