We call this an internal dialogue, Yes, Yes we do (Part 2)

Tink...

Tink...

Tink...

Tink...

 

He sips at the cup

Ah caffeine

 

Hmmm

 

I wonder...

 

If I take an axe to these people...

Will their eyes stop disappearing?

 

Oh s**t, wait...

Prison would be involved

Dammnit!

 

But my Lord and master would be pleased!

No! No he wouldn't! they must harm you first!

But but but the eyes are watching...

NO!

Oh ok...

 

Maybe if I ju...

No!

Dammnit! Thats the problem with schzophrenia. Privacy is a b***h

Quiet you! Finish the poem!

 

A figure opens the door

 

The cup drops from his hand

No!

Not!

You!

Please!

 

 

Reviews

[Calypso]

Interesting. Very cool write

[Alex Walters]

This is a very interesting take on both poetry and storytelling.

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intriguing ideas..

[Joiedevivre]

well portrayed!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Prized and sever with no apology's well done

[Tasha]

This was really good I can't wait to read what happens next..

[Naomi Roseღ]

Haha I thought the fifth and sixth stanza were funny. I am curious to what happens next

[Ravyne Hawke]

As one who hears voices, I can relate well to this poem. The internal struggle of mental illness is displayed well here. Great job!

[Helpless]

you describe the inside look on insanity of a worn out soul so well

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Oh Wow! I am seeing quite a story unfolding here............