We call this an internal dialogue, Yes, Yes we do

He strolls down the streets of London

Glaring at the neon

The wonderful neon

A reclusive extrovert locked in his own mind

 

Into a dreary cafe

He lurked

Eyes shooting over the room staring out at the people who occupy the corners

Corners, precious

These people with those eyes

Trapped inside their heads like a puppy in a cage

Being beaten daily with a barrage of vocal tortue

 

What would you say if you saw that in everyones eyes?

You'd go insane!

I already have

 

Anyway...

 

He bumbled past the tables

Hearing them whisper and glare

Orders a cup o' coffee

And sits

Alone on the floor

Staring at the world

 

Now remember the eyes?

 

Well do you?!

 

They've vanished like a light being pulled from the mains

Now it's dark

He smiles

Tapping his fingers on his cup

 

Tink...

Tink...

Tink...

Tink...

 

Reviews

[Fontane Wong]

Fantastic. A truly amazing piece. Love the scale, it's well planned and flowed out gracefully. This poem kind of reminds myself. A very realistic, creepy and imagery poem. Incredible write here, love it so much. Thanks for sharing such a fascinating pice with readers.

P.S. While I'm reading this piece, my stomach is flipping up and down for coffee!

[Ravyne Hawke]

I love this! A well-versed inner dialogue.. I love the imagery and the sounds at the end.. nearly all of my senses are delighted by this poem!

[Helpless]

this is incredible! just the way that you came through on this one and the back and forth motion of the mind within it, very striking! loved it!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Excellent, you have penned insanity and paranoia very well

[Lily Mae]

I love it..xx

[Aurora Lynn]

First of all I would like to say thank you for your review on 'Sea of Gold'! Now for the poem. This was a great poem, and I really liked reading it. It flowed nicely from line to line and stanza to stanza. I could tell that this guy was insane, but not too insane that the poem didn't make any sense. Well done!
~Aurora

[Tasha]

Is there a second part to this? It was really good, you did a fabulous job.