Stay with me

I beg you,

Stay here,

Please be mine forever,

Take me in your arms until the end of time,

Those arms of love,

 

You leave and i feel the tears,

Well to my eyes,

 

if you choose to leave,

Then kill me,

If you will not,

Just,

Stay with me

Author's Note

I wrote this when i was crying about my ex coz i suck that much :/ so please review

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

You have a talent for making me think of girl punk bands singing your poems as lyrics except i am at a total loss with this poem. I am leaning to Lisa Loeb, but it also reminds me of Avril for some reason. Either way, awesome job, and in the words of every sassy black chick i ever met.

Girl you dont need no man all up in your business! You A strong woman girl!

they dont say that to me, its usually, 'wow M your the coolest kid in town" but thats rare.

[Calypso]

Until love does end.

[Lily Mae]

Heart ache and break is the worst.. the feelings just don't go away because they've walked away.. You've penned these emotions well...great write. I hope your heart heals soon...xx

[HopelesslyDevoted]

ouch, i can feel the pain in this one. i know how you feel though, i'm no stranger to heartbreak

[KAREN]

Very heartfelt, I can feel the pain!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Your poem speaks of your distress! Chin up it will get better.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

I digress. You do not suck.
You are a gifted writer. You are a young man, navigating a complex world. Your poem is your truth at the moment. Next read you may feel differently. it's all about growth and recognizing that it is never easy. Keep applying yourself...keep writing.
There are lots of wonderful ladies out there.