Fruitful kisses

Your lips as red

As the finest wine

Straight from the vineyard

Grapes as sweet as your eyes

 

Her love as sweet as sugar

Cascading love

Upon all

 

Her flowing hair as soft as kashmere

As red as strawberries

That caress your lips

 

Your kisses

So fruitful

For she is my fruity friend :)

 

Reviews

[iamkim]

fruity-sweet piece! love it!

[Madison A. Wright]

this is a change of pace for you my friend.. very sweet...made my mouth water as i could taste your wine and fruitful kisses...

[Short.Nerd]

Nice:)

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is a beautiful poem of sweet seduction.. tantilizing to this reader.

My only advise.. stick with YOU throughout the poem. The switching of pronouns is a bit confusing. Also, look up the word cashmere and see if it can be spelt also with a K.. otherwise, you may wish to change the K to a C.

Delightful poem, my friend.

[.shalynn.009.]

I was a bit confused by the switching back and forth between "you" and "she' but other than that and a possible misspelling of cashmere (unless there are different ways of spelling it), I liked this alot. I really liked that you kept bringing it back to that comparison to strawberries, because red is the color of all passionate feelings. Another sweet one (no pun intended) for a lucky girl. Keep up the writing adn keep sending the RRs.

[Ruth]

Fruity indeed! Beautifully worded too! xx

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a scrumptous little poem..quirky and fun..

[Coyote Poetry]

Using sweet fruit and red wine is always a good way to describe a woman. I like the description and the very good ending to this poem. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Calypso]

Very sensual.