Alice in break up land

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When Alice first met her knight in shining armor he seemed perfect. From the first date he showed his chivalrous side opening doors and everything from grabbing the check and texting the next day, but sadly some times that knight is no knight at all and that armor is just tin foil and kitchen ware and suddenly your mascaras down your cheeks and ben and jerry are consoling you (or tempting you)

But how do you coop past that Ben and Jerry phase? How do you get over it?

Sweetie I am asking what is your break up kit?

 

“Fabulous! Holly I am impressed. The comments are exploding on this; I want you to write a story on it.” My boss Jamie said she smiled so big the creases she wore deepened around her eyes.

“Really? How so? What do you mean?”

I asked loving that I was finally gonna have a story out on one of the most viewed dating advice sites.  

“Baby I am talking in-depth interviews, techniques and pit fall’s THE works you know.”

I beamed and left her office to hurry home and set up my attack plan.

 

 

Alice isn’t like most girls she is more reserved she is careful and that’s why if someone breaks her heart she takes it hard. Tonight it would be a week since he had left her. She had decided to spend her afternoon with a good book to distract her and allow for any tearful events that transpired, Alice was 26 and she had been in this relationship since her early twenties and now four years later she was abandon. Her son had been a year old and had become quite accustom to her man had grown to love him right along with her.

Her technique for this was the good ol tradition of letting time heals such wounds.

Alice washed her face to wash away any signs of sadness then checked on her son.

Adrian was still sleeping, suddenly her phone rang and she hurried out of the room to answer it.

“Hol, I shoulda known,” she said entering her own room and sitting down on her bed.

“Yeah bae I am predictable, but hey I wanted to check on you How are you?” I asked already hearing in her voice she was stressed.

“Pft, Fine I am a rock you know, I just donno what to tell Ad he keeps asking and how am I supposed to tell him we have been left for a white girl.”

I loved Alice’s spice she was a bright beautiful Latina woman and she was a protector and fighter for her son. She had been treated differently for being a single mom and she expected the worst and prepared for it. Her way of dealing with a break up was complete isolation from men.

 

Alice’s Reasons:

A man caused this problem so are you gonna rush out just get the first one you see?

If your computer crashes are you just going to go out and buy the first cheap one available or are you gonna research find out why it crashed and maybe try and avoid that kind of computer. I hope you would. It is the same in love, don’t rush out and get into more of the same trouble you already got, let yourself heal examine the problems face them and then move on trust me honey you will be glad you did.

Reviews

[DaughterNature]

First of all, I really like the idea of a "break-up kit," and I think a reporter is a great choice for narrator -- she allows you to address all of the women's stories without difficulty. However, I do have some recommendations. First, I'm not sure if you noticed, but your font style and size changes all over this first page, and it is very distracting and hard to read -- but that's just housekeeping. As for the writing, I think it is ok, and I can tell you have put a little thought into the development of the characters, but remember who your narrator is: a reporter. If she's a writer, then she will have NO typos in her story, and she probably also will write everything more in the style of a journalist than a novelist, so the sentences will probably be shorter with more active verbs and active syntax. All that being said, I love the idea, and I can't wait to see more!

[Shema]

Thank you so much for the pointers I'll make sure to construct a more realistic chapter for next time, and I'll try not to mess with the fonts to much.maybe I'll edit this one then repost. Thanks again my first online story so I can use all the help I can get!

[DaughterNature]

Welcome! I'm excited to see what you can do!