and that you are Shelby - a true writer!
HI IT'S COLIN - AS YOU KNOW MY ACCOUNT HERE IS EMPTY
BUT I AM RUNNING A WEBSITE I THINK YOU MIGHT LIKE TO JOIN: thepoeticminds.ning.com (poetry, literature, and dreams) WHERE WE ARE LOOKING FOR UNIQUE (THAT'S YOU)
DARING (THAT'S YOU) AND BOLD PEOPLE (YOU AGAIN!)
to light up our marquee - and basically do anything they want - contribute blog posts - ask questions - share your photography and artwork.....we are a friendly group of international artists and writers who endorse each other's artistic freedom and freedom of speech!
I agree with Christopher Dallas... it is minimalist but there isn't enough power to convince me. It would also be better to fix up your grammar, it takes away from any potential power there might be within the piece.
Although I do agree, writers do equal crazy, there is no doubt about that!
I'll dissent by saying that, although this is minimalist, it's unconvincing.
In this format, however subtle or concise, you need empathy.
Sometimes, you can achieve that with one simple, well-placed word.
I do like the voice emphasis you've spoken this in.