My Greatest Fear

My Greatest Fear

 

 

 

 

_{My fear  isnt about}

 _{Being a lonely old hag nobody wants to be around}

 _{Getting into a crash and not being able to walk}

 _{Dying and being the devils little torture doll}

_{Spiders crawling all over my body}

_{Tight dark spaces that will crush me}

 

_{Oh no}

 

_{My fear is greater than that}

_{It’s the fear of having my family judge my writing}

_{Just think of what would be going through their minds}

 

       _{That goes through her head?}

        _{Is she really thinking about doing that?}

              _{She really needs to see a therapist!}

 

_{I don’t mind having the whole world}

_{judge my writing}

_{But when my family is reviewing it}

_{I get tight knots in my stomach} 

My Greatest Fear is..

_{If they think I’m going crazy..}

Reviews

[WeekendWriter]

The good and the bad.... I'm not very good at sugar-coating and I don't believe it helps.... I'll start with the bad.... Grammar is important, as is spelling. 'Toture', 'then' should be than and 'hole' should be 'whole' to name a couple. Little things really, but if you aspire to be published, those things could make the difference.

Okay, now the good, and there is good in it!! =) I think you give great insight into your inner thoughts and feelings. I really like the first paragraph. You portray yourself as being afraid, without being fearful.

Keep writing.... you've got something going on here =)

[_////---Elektrik Phanto..]

the only true insanity is sanity. people are the sum total of all they have interacted with throughout their individual lives. like marylin manson said: "...i was born in america- a land that hates me for what i am...i am YOUR s**t. you should be ashamed of what you have eaten."

[Allegra Pescatore]

alright, I think the concept of this poem is fantastic, I can totally relate. However, I do not get "poem" out of this. There is no rhythm. Now Im not one for rhyme and careful syllable structure, but for me a poem has to be more than line breaks. There is nothing in here that couldn't just as easily be a soliloquy. i would like to see it be it's full potential and, while i emphasize heavily with the idea, I am not captured by the words. Sorry I'm being harsh, you have a great voice, you just need to do what all writers strive for. A little editing.

[allonsy_doctor]

Its sort of funny in it's own way, you know? It's reeeeeeeeeally good though! It expresses your true feelings. I loved it! Awesome job!

[Wicahpi]

Exactly why my family has no idea that i write poetry here!
It is written in my last will so they can read everything;
then i won't care if they think I'm crazy!! haha

I can understand, totally.
Great Write with Truth!

[Lilly]

such a great piece! I understand your fear - It is easier for me (though still a little hard at times) for me to let 'the world' read/review what I write than to have my family do that...

[Roy]

Ahem! Have gone through this! My mom, fortunately, turns out be as crazy as myself: so she appreciates my work, but my Dad seriously thinks I've gone nuts! A grain of salt for all us 'weirdos' :P, though I don't mind being called one! Nicely conveyed!

[Wolfe Greytome]

This is a great piece. A few minor spelling and grammar mistakes (which I am going to assume were just typos) but overall still a well written piece. And in it you capture the feeling that everyone possesses - fear. It doesn't matter how many faceless people judge us on a daily basis, fear always raises its ugly head when someone we care about catches a glimpse into our innermost thought processes. Well done!!!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I think its definitely hard because you will have people that are wondering
what they did to make you turn out the way your writing turned out. I myself also worry about my family analyzing every thing that ever happened to me.
There are also fears of my close ones feeling guilt for not noticing "things that happened to me". They may think everything is real in our writings and try to fix us. There is also the disappointment in our opinions that could potentially hurt them. This was a really honest look into the mind of a writer. This poem has suspense and that kept me interested. I had no idea what was coming. You did a great job of making a great poem out of an idea that is so overlooked. The only bad thing about this poem is that it ended. You made a beautiful statement.

[Sheila Kline]

Well stated! I think as a writer we all stop and think about what our closest family and friends will think of us.
You have certainly done an excellent job of revealing your concerns.
I like the way you presented some of the normal/average fears in the beginning, and then led into yours.

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