The good and the bad.... I'm not very good at sugar-coating and I don't believe it helps.... I'll start with the bad.... Grammar is important, as is spelling. 'Toture', 'then' should be than and 'hole' should be 'whole' to name a couple. Little things really, but if you aspire to be published, those things could make the difference.
Okay, now the good, and there is good in it!! =) I think you give great insight into your inner thoughts and feelings. I really like the first paragraph. You portray yourself as being afraid, without being fearful.
Keep writing.... you've got something going on here =)
I never let my family read my writing, except for my siblings, of course. Because I have the same fear as you. But I think in the world of writing, creativity is craziness. I understand how family members will think once they read and cast on negative judgement. Still, the greatest fear might be just whether the writer accept the craziness, the jugdement, and the therapist within the writer him/herself. I have conquered that fear which takes years to do so. As long as you're truthfully comfort with your own sanity, a writer within you will not fear to be judged by insanity.
Excellent. Captures a feeling many writers have, but it doesn't occur to them to make a poem of it. I can definitely relate to this.
Also, the expressive use of fonts works well, I think.
You've wrapped this subject into a beautiful poem. Words cannot express how many times this has gone through my head. Though not all of my writing is based on my thoughts and feelings, there are bits and pieces in every single one that I have been through, or can relate to. I believe as a writer, our fears are greater. We tend to think deeper into things (maybe more than we should).
I get you!! I got all my writing in a blue notebook I carry everywhere and I'm always scared that someone notice that I always have that notebook and feel tempted to check what's on it. Very realistic poem, our fears can be so big that they can even determine our actions!!
Posted 14 Years Ago
Great! It's so true, I think we all think this. This poem is beautiful in it's simplicity. I also really like the format :)
I appreciated reading your writing. When I was a teen, my parents constantly criticized everything artistic I created, hence my hesitation to sketch anymore. Excellent writing. Very honest and well said.