My Greatest Fear

My Greatest Fear

 

 

 

 

_{My fear  isnt about}

 _{Being a lonely old hag nobody wants to be around}

 _{Getting into a crash and not being able to walk}

 _{Dying and being the devils little torture doll}

_{Spiders crawling all over my body}

_{Tight dark spaces that will crush me}

 

_{Oh no}

 

_{My fear is greater than that}

_{It’s the fear of having my family judge my writing}

_{Just think of what would be going through their minds}

 

       _{That goes through her head?}

        _{Is she really thinking about doing that?}

              _{She really needs to see a therapist!}

 

_{I don’t mind having the whole world}

_{judge my writing}

_{But when my family is reviewing it}

_{I get tight knots in my stomach} 

My Greatest Fear is..

_{If they think I’m going crazy..}

Reviews

[WeekendWriter]

The good and the bad.... I'm not very good at sugar-coating and I don't believe it helps.... I'll start with the bad.... Grammar is important, as is spelling. 'Toture', 'then' should be than and 'hole' should be 'whole' to name a couple. Little things really, but if you aspire to be published, those things could make the difference.

Okay, now the good, and there is good in it!! =) I think you give great insight into your inner thoughts and feelings. I really like the first paragraph. You portray yourself as being afraid, without being fearful.

Keep writing.... you've got something going on here =)

[EdgarLovecraft]

well structured and a dark ambiance

[Patrick Henry]

That's awesome!! lol If this isn't an example of indecision, I don't know what IS. : ) Reminds me of the days of writing things down in my notebook, and then later checking to see what I wrote and being surprised as to trying to figure out what my frame of mind was!! I like it...... and the crossing out of "Oh No". xoxo -Mark

[Lee Wilson]

Writing for many is an outlet. a way to express ones inner most thoughts and in no way should any one judge other wise. Now granted there are those that do write of planns to harms them sleves and the like and those people do need help. but, in many cases writings are just an out-let of feelings.
I think you did a wonderful job, It is not the normal fears we have, but the fear of being judged by those closest to us.

[Carolyn]

this is exactly how i feel! Good work keep it up :)

[Alicia™]

I think this portrays a lot of writers' (and other artists') feelings towards their art. It's the same for me. While I wouldn't say it's my biggest fear, it's still scary. It's funny how even though I don't mind everyone reading everything I write, the closer that person is to me, the more nervous I get… Great job, Shelby!

[kait]

my parents would send me to a therapist for sure if they saw my writing

[Victoria Harlequin]

Aha! I can relate to this. If my family seen some of the things I write, they might do something that would result in my suffering... O.o Great write!

[alan peter kelly]

Very clever utilisation of technology...art makes us strange so I embraced the thought that people may think what they will a long time ago...however...that having been said...this was wholly entertaining and a revelation in new technique...original and inspiritory.

[^~FireNinja~^]

Its really good. A few grammatical errors here and there but I love this poem! its speaks to a lot of writers, because most are afraid to show their work. Your insight on your feelings is very real and something that people can relate to. Keep up the good work this is awesome!

[Gomer LePoet]

I hear you loud and clear. nobody remotely close to me even knows that I write.
been wanting to show them but some of my stuff is pretty weird. I bet there are more just like us out here.