I wrote this when i was small
I've never been abused.
i shocked my parents and the female i was in the writing group with this writing.
but hey it got published in the newspaper
tell me what you guys think.
I also dont know if i have it in the right Genre.
please help on that
thank you
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I think context is very important with writing...i think what you wrote was brilliant if it was a dialogue, say to someone like the SOS on the phone or the cops...sometimes the best writing is straight forward and simple like yours, however if to add more punch you might like to contextualise this as a phone call dialogue/monologue...the impact then would have been a lot greater...imagine hearing those simple phrases but from someone in real life...it would be powerful...thanks for sharing your poem with us...
I think context is very important with writing...i think what you wrote was brilliant if it was a dialogue, say to someone like the SOS on the phone or the cops...sometimes the best writing is straight forward and simple like yours, however if to add more punch you might like to contextualise this as a phone call dialogue/monologue...the impact then would have been a lot greater...imagine hearing those simple phrases but from someone in real life...it would be powerful...thanks for sharing your poem with us...
Wow..amazing. It's creepy, but I love creepy stuff. BLood...glorious. When first reading it, I thought of werewolves and vampires...mostly werewolves. But after the last line, it's true meaning became clear. Awesome job and keep it up!
Chilling.
My eyes grew wider and wider with each line, the last few especially.
Upfront and brutal.
No flourishes or flowy language used here, and I really think that's what makes it good.
Congratulations on it's being published. ^-^
It's a great piece.
woah! i LOVED it! Its really great i thought at the beginning it was gonna be like a werewolf or something. :D
Would you mind reveiwing my poem "I Dont Wanna Die"
Tough subject to write on, definitely like the first version better a little less direct, lets me draw my own conclusions a little more. Good job...keep writing, keep posting. Thanks.
I think the second one was better. This didn't seem to flow as well, and I didn't get the same impact from it. But that's just me. Sometimes when revising a poem it can get better, other times it just doesn't work. I think it worked for you.
Great poem for a kid, though. Well Done.
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