NoteBook Of A Teenger

By far i think the best thing ive ever done

In the note book of a teenager,
there is often a pome,
of love or life,
or a problem at home,

It might be that their life,
seems to be at i's end,
and thir tear stand notebook,
is there dearest friend,

there are so many like this,
but they are all not the same,
so many feed up,
with lifes sick and twisted games,

so many pomes of death and of cuting,
about how hard they try ,
and still amount to nothing,

they're so sick of the pain,
and so sick of the hurt,
so sick of being picked on,
and teated like dirt,

some alone in the crowd,
some at home in the dark,
some with friends,
some with none at all,
some sithing calmly through the trorture,
some bouncing off the walls.

Reviews

[!!..Love..!!]

Oh! This is great, and as a teen myself I can really relate myself with it.

[J.Black]

If you fix the spelling errors, this poem will be excellent!
Keep up the good work, I know you have it in you to be a fantastic writer!

Cheers!
x

[Anata]

Yes indeed not bad, but you do have alot of spelling mistakes.
For example:

pome should be poem
there should be their in certain sentences
sithing should be sitting

and some more too.

But if you work on your spelling and vocabulary it would make an even better poem.

[Alasse Fefalas]

A little work needs to be done about the spelling mistakes, but I think overall it's a nice poem. Very down-to-earth with what the teenagers in society is going to now, and I quite like that. Just work on your spelling, and it'll be a great poem. (: