Adam and Eve's Real Plight

Adam and Eve

First love of the world.

Don’t you wish

You had that title?

No.

Adam spent

Every single f*****g day

With Eve,

What can I say?

I’d rather pay

With a few broken hearts

The choice to choose

Than to play those sorry parts.

Poor Eve

Never knew the difference

She never understood

How he was a hindrance.

I would hate

Never knowing what it was

To have to date

Eighty different guys.

Young Adam

Could have been a ladies’ man

He never knew

And now he never can.

To take advantage

Of every single night,

A different partner

Every morning light;

What a way

To spend a day

Trying to decide

Who will be your guide

Staying by your side

Until the morning tide.

And never knowing

Which one will stick around

Love is growing

With a random guy you found.

Adam and Eve,

Perhaps they were their soul mates,

But I wonder

Would they envy all our play mates?

Did they fight?

Did they loathe each others’ sight?

Was Eve right

In taking that first bite?

I can’t know,

But I know this to be true:

Poor Adam and Eve,

I’d die if I were you.

Reviews

[Ian Faraway]

Breaking heart sucks, but I'd rather do that and learn lessons on the real life then finding my soul mate in one try. It would be nice, yeah, but what would I learn from that? J'adore.

[Karina Longo]

Your poem may sound as too 'modern' or 'cheeky' to some, but I'm really glad that it doesn't sound like that to me - at least not in a bad way. It's a very inspirational, true and well-structured writing and I love how you won't write in an old-fashioned way just because the main characters are Adam and Eve (You'd even curse! Brilliant!). The right to choose, make mistakes again and again and then maybe learn; break your heart and then heal it again is what really makes life worth living.
Great word-play here as well. A truly original, well-written poem which I really enjoyed reading. You're amazing. :)