Echoing voices

This is for a friend who committed suicide.

Our voices echoed in the stairs,

where we laughed so heartily,

giggling and snickering everywhere,

people were ready to check us mentally.

For they thought we were crazy,

and we sure must have been,

but then you took off so easily 

leaving behind your kith and kin.

I will never blame you,

I can only blame myself,

how did I fail to help you,

take those thoughts off the shelf.

If only I had known,

your laughter wasn't as free,

reasons to live, I would've shown,

to simply make you agree,

But now, my voice echoes in the stairs,

where I cry desperately,

weeping and bellowing everywhere,

people are ready to check me mentally.

Reviews

[AaronFreitas]

It's a painful thing to live through and experience when someone close to you takes their life. It leaves so many unanswered questions they we take to our grave never getting to understand "why?" You shared a valuable truth from the perspective of those left hurt after a suicide. Well done

[rhymeaway]

Thank you for reading and commenting! :)

[rhymeaway]

Thank you for reading and commenting! :)

[Kass]

The words, emotions, and thoughts put into this poem were so deeply felt! I loved the flow of the rhythm and how gently it swayed along. I sense great writing in you! Keep it up!

[rhymeaway]

Wow thanks for such a great review!

[Southern_Writes]

Oh wow, I got the goosebumps! Love this message, it really rings loudly within me. Good work!

[rhymeaway]

Thank you so much!

[annalysiar]

Great write its gripping and real. Raw.
I had a friend commit suicide as well when I was younger... This is hard to deal with and bear. But time is a great teacher...
I am sorry for your loss, just know your friend is with you.

[rhymeaway]

Thank you for your review :)

[annalysiar]

Thank you for sharing

[Bear]

Bravo! A nice tribute to your friend. We each chose our own path through life and while you can have an influence on the people you meet along the way you can not dictate the path they chose. I can give all the reasons there is to live but unless those reasons have purpose to you they are meaningless. No matter what you think or how hard you think it, you can't live someone else's life so you can't be responsible for someone else's fate. What you can do is live your life the best way you know how and hope your inspiration of others is a positive one :~)

[rhymeaway]

Thank you so much for reading and your support! I wasn't very close to her but we would always laugh each time we met. I feel worse for her best friends and family.

[Reed]

People often hide their pain... Don't blame yourself.. You couldn't know what she was going to do... You just couldn't.
There were cases that five minutes before they decided to die, they were laughing with friends, and then, they get left alone... And it's done.
You couldn't have known.
Well written.

[rhymeaway]

Yes it happened somewhat that way. Thank you for your support!