How?

How do you do it?

Make me feel like a school girl again.

All giggly and giddy whenever you're near.

Like the world is sunshine

There's no reason to fear.

 

How do you do it?

Make me hand over my heart

In the swiftest blink of an eye

Never once thinking

You might say goodbye

 

How do you do it?

Never show a trace of remorse

For what you do

When you look at the wreckage

That is me after you

 

How do you do it?

Sleep at night knowing

The pain you have caused

The innocence you murdered

When you decided to walk

 

How do I do it?

Survive each day

A shell of my former self

Smiling and pretending

I'm not going through hell

 

How do I do it?

Conivince others with my lies

That I don't want you back

If only I could convince myself

I wouldn't say yes just like that

 

How do we do it?

Day after day after day

Pretending it wasn't a mistake

To give up on our love

Turn and walk away

 

How do we do it?

Put on such a good show

We even have us convinced

That we don't think about it always

Haven't thought about it since

 

How do I do it?

Convince you that you were wrong

That this is where you should be

Not trying to love someone else

Finding your love again for me...

Author's Note

This hasn't been edited yet so you know the deal no rating yet.... but visit back soon... ps... I painted the art myself...

Reviews

[Adam Jordan Turner]

Ok this one has major potential. Let me give you a quick suggestion and tell me what you think about it, an experiment, see if you'd like to try. I think the beginning makes the poem seem like it's going to be very sweet and romantic and then it sort of just goes bitter. Like really fast. It would be a good tool to stretch out the sweetness and then twist it with a bitter ending, but the twist came too soon, the transitions were not very strong throughout the entire piece. The changing of subjects didn't happen very well. However I think a simple rearrangement could make it amazing if you'll allow me to suggest:

How about taking the first two stanzas, rewrite them in the past tense, just changing a few words, and then place them at the end of the piece.

How do you do it?
Never show a trace of remorse
For what you do
When you look at the wreckage
That is me after you

How do you do it?
Sleep at night knowing
The pain you have caused
The innocence you murdered
When you decided to walk

How do I do it?
Survive each day
A shell of my former self
Smiling and pretending
I'm not going through hell

How do I do it?
Conivince others with my lies
That I don't want you back
If only I could convince myself
I wouldn't say yes just like that

How do we do it?
Day after day after day
Pretending it wasn't a mistake
To give up on our love
Turn and walk away

How do we do it?
Put on such a good show
We even have us convinced
That we don't think about it always
Haven't thought about it since

How do I do it?
Convince you that you were wrong
That this is where you should be
Not trying to love someone else
Finding your love again for me...

How did you do it?
Make me feel like a school girl again.
All giggly and giddy whenever you were near.
Like the world was sunshine
There was no reason to fear.

How did you do it?
Make me hand over my heart
In the swiftest blink of an eye
Never once thinking
You might say goodbye

This way I feel it is more direct, it gets right to the point not trying to bring the reader in on something sweet that will go away very quickly, and this way the poem begins and ends with the subject being him. It took a journey through you both but you didn't write it to admit your faults; you want to know the answer, How? And that is for him to answer, let it begin with him and conclude with him. He owes you answers. Also that way it makes the transitions, being so spontaneous, more powerful. I think this placement especially works wonders with the placement after the ellipse(...) it kind of brings the reader back to present day, to where you are now. And this way, ending with "goodbye" leaves a very descent sense of vacancy in the reader, so they can channel your lonesome. But that's only my opinion. You could work on making some of the rhymes less simple and put a little more meaning to some of the repetition, but other than that, nice write!