if only

we can't always have what we want....

If only I didn't think of you,

Everytime I open my mind.

If only I didn't see you,

Everytime I close my eyes.

 

If only you weren't the first,

Thought I have everyday.

If only you weren't my first,

True, honest heartbreak.

 

If only it didn't seem,

Like the world would end tonight,

If only it didn't keep,

Going on; no end in sight.

 

If only these thoughts,

Weren't so cliché.

If only it wasn't worn out,

Everything I say.

 

If only it could be original,

Like hemmingway or wright.

If only heartbreak weren't,

A clichéd state of mind.

 

If only tears were foreign,

To the average mind

If only people couldn't

understand why I cry.

 

If only I could remember,

What I wanted this poem to be.

If only I could imortalize,

That feeling of you with me.

 

If only...

If only...

 

Author's Note

I don't know where it went....it wasn't supposed to be like this... it was supposed to be profound lol... I am not a profound type person I guess.... its not open for rating because I haven't decided if I like it but I know I dobt I do.... if that makes sence.... anyway thanks for reading...

Reviews

[Adam Jordan Turner]

Hahahaha I love the biginning but i totally know where you mind went. Well I don't know where your mind went but I know how that can happen when you're writing something awesome and it just goes completely off course. Very brave of you to post it anyway. I Really, sincerely enjoyed it up until the last two lines of the fifth stanza. That's where it became, "I have to finish this poem" I think you could replace those two lines with something else, and do one more stanza to close and this would get you some pretty sweet ratings! Nice write, A for effort!

[Illegitimate Artist]

I disagree. In its own way I think this piece is pretty profound!

The way you work the readers into the poem is really ingenious.

"If only people couldn't
understand why I cry."

It really includes the people who've been through this, as most everyone has, and kind of makes them nod their heads in agreement as they read.

I think it's a good piece. Had a nice pace, easy flow. Thumbs up to you!

I like this! Very good! I think the words if only are very powerful. I am sure that a lot of people have if only's. I liked the honesty in this poem. Great write!

[Poeticpiers]

If onlyperhaps the saddest phrase in the english language. I find that poems do not always do as I expect especially where my emotions are concerned. You have a tendency to reveal more than you intend to reveal. It comes across as sincere