I'm sorry, I Lied.

When I told you it was forever,

Unintentionally, I lied.

I said I'd leave never,

I didn't mean to but I lied.

 

I lied when I told you,

I would always care.

I lied when I said,

I would always be there.

 

I lied when I told you,

Through thick or thin.

I lied when I said,

Loose or win.

 

I lied when I told you,

Till death do us part.

I lied when I said,

You'd always have my heart.

 

And when I said,

I'd be by your side,

Once again,

Baby, I lied.

 

But how was I to know,

The way things would go?

I always thought it was the truth,

Every little fib I told.

 

So when I said forever,

Know I didn't mean to lie,

But how was I to know,

That you'd say goodbye?

 

 

Reviews

[Blake Q Hatfield]

Definately a nice twist on the breakee in a relationship. At first I'm thinking this is someone breaking up in a kinda casual and almost logical/cold way, but when you take it all in with that last line, it seems more empowering, like the breakee is saying "you left me, you ended this, but I'll get over it for the better." The flow of this poem is excellent, and definately one you want to read again! Well done!

[Travis Lawrence]

Lots of truth here, we change our minds and make lies when we do, even if we didn't mean them to be lies when we said it. I hope that made sense. I enjoyed this, thanks for sharing.

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

lies can suck ones soul down to the great dark spots of their own mind. it's even worse for the one telling the lie because they have to carry it upon their shoulders the rest of their life. it's such a horrible feeling. great poem.

[Fran Marie]

Love the twist at the end~ Great write and enjoable read~Fran Marie

[Adam Jordan Turner]

Very well done Frances! I love this piece. I love the approach you take on the entire situation, it's almost comical. Actually i think this piece has a great little sense of humor to it, almost as if the author were speaking it directly to the person it's about. It's really a kick in the arse to the person it's written about, you make it look as if you're speaking up for you faults, kind of being a little stoic in admitting you lied, and then you turn it around to not only did, he leave but it's also his fault that everything you said turned to lies. I really really like the tone of this piece, it remains very level and very unapologetic, and very sarcastic the entire way through. I love how the other is pretty much saying, "I'm sorry YOU lied" It's seems like that is the point of the piece. Very nice write, nice twist!

[Imperfection]

I wasn't expecting the ending to be like that.

Most of the times, we assume what we perceive to be the truth.
More often than not, it's not.

Great write.

[LilyGrace]

I really like this - especially the way the voice seems like the 'bad guy' all the way through, but at the end we realise it's the object of the poem who ended things. Nicely twisted there! Well written with a nice rhythm.
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