Angels at heavens gate

 

He was her dream man in every sense

He was smart and funny, it must have been ment.

Sweet and Kind a gentleman to the last

A whirl wind relationship, marriage in a flash.

 

Nine months later a daughter so sweet

Another side of him she’d yet to meet.

It started in the middle of one night

When the baby kept crying no matter what she tried.

 

His irritation he made very clear

With a slap so hard it rang in her ears.

And even though she begged him “please”

He used his fist till she hit her knees

 

With the baby crying in the back ground

He just kept going till he beat her down

With her black eyes swelled with tears

She crawled to her daughter

And tried to calm her fears

 

And though she shouldn’t,

She continued to stay

It wasn’t his fault,

Just a stressful day

It’d be alright come morning light

There’d be no repeats of that terrible night.

 

Day by day she continued to live

Always remembering but destined to forgive

And when it happened yet again

She told herself it was her own sin

 

That caused this time for him to break

When you do something wrong you accept your fate

All she wanted was his love

Now she fly’s on wings like a dove

 

An angel sent to heavens gate

Dead by love shown with actions of hate

If only he’d known what it would do

When he “loved” his wife to death

And his Daughter too…

Reviews

[Blackbirdsong]

There are meter problems in this which I think would be easiest to find if you read this to yourself or even outloud and found any places that either made you stumble or pause. The subject is heartrending, but I wonder if this poem might be even more powerful if you removed the rhymes and just did it as a free verse.

Good job just the same.

[Legion]

Sad story and so often true. The rhyming was a bit to coerced for my taste, but you definetly got the point across.