PERDITION

the roll of thunder
begs a nurtured cry
counting down a lightning strike
stripped silence to smothering light

dust gathers in the silhouette
tethered for a downward crawl
hopes only exit
surrenders to intrinsic

vicious and sincere is the device
a glimpse of a gleam off steal
forging shape into links
rattling the weight of a chain

the tongue of destiny
that is where my name lies
whispers in a state of grace
how subtle is perdition

Terry D'Arcy-Ryan

Reviews

[Edizen]

Okay I'm just gonna gun this out in my way of interpretation and it'll probably be weird but here goes.
Lines 1&2 a new born baby in need of nurturing and care. Lines 3&4 life flashes and it is faster than you thing so make the most of it. Lines 5&6 life will get harder as you grow older. lines 7&8 and eventually you will die. Lines 9,10,11&12 this is a vicious cycle that the living is bound to without exception, this is the weight of life and you can't escape. lines 13&14 we will have no choice but to face the music at some point i.e. death.
lines 15&16 questions whether you will go out with grace being content with the life you have lived, or will you fade away in the abyss without ever leaving a mark?
kinda wordy I know, sorry for that. also I would actually like to know what you were actually thinking about when you wrote this. really like the subtlety in this one.

[Alao Taiwo]

a tongue of destiny strikes me one-kind or perhaps one-of-a-kind. Perhaps you could explain
what you mean within context. However, a state of grace is understood. Even Mahatma Ghandi believes in the ideal of "a state of grace"... Alrite

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

The tongue of destiny , I use this term dramatically, the burden is not as heavy if it is destined. The point of the line ,is that I am already doomed , destined for doom. Thank you for ready and reviewing my poetry, you rock !

Sheer Terror

[Gaurav]

its a welcome freshness your words portray...awesome

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Hello
I did not see your review until , now . Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poetry

Sheer Terror

[wordman]

a mild stage of boredom ,not the write ,the theme,seems the writer is suffering boredom,or maybe some depression

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Thank you for the review Wordman.

Sheer Terror

[wordman]

you`re welcome