INSIDIOUS VIEW TO A SPIDER

menacing black silhouette occupant of doom

silently working a slow venom bloom

deliberate struts on a stretch of silk string

pin point needles work threads to cling

long elegant strands tethered for a crossing

woven rows of windows

lies kept inside silk blinds in tow

ominous, outlaw perched beside terror

another victim caught in a sticky horror

courage moves fear a step closer to capture

intricate weave of warfare

the snare into hopeless surrender

thralled by the looming ferocious creature

simply spinning reflex into smother

the insidious view of a spider

                                                                                                                       

                                                                                                                                           Terry D'Arcy-Ryan

                                                                                                                                                            

Reviews

[Alao Taiwo]

"the spider skillfully grasp with it's hands and is in kings' places"- that's a Bible verse. Meaning Hardwork is Diligence plus Skill. Yours is really an insidious view to a spider.
"Intricate weave of warfare" sounds ok

[Nipplegrinder]

God, damn. This is remarkable.

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

The "Insidious View to a Spider " this was fun to write and it stems from a short story I attempted about a lady living alone, fearful of spiders. When she finds one in her kitchen she keeps him captive in the end she watches the spider night and day she will not let the spider leave. Thank you for the outstanding review

Sheer Terror

[Ethan]

This isn't bad, but it feels disjointed and mechanical, as though you were writing a poetic grocery list. That's just my opinion, however. Keep writing.

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

The original is much longer, I felt it was edited well it may be something to look at. Thank you for the review

Sheer Terror

[andrew mitchell]

Nicely written, my mother all her life had a fear of spiders and could not kill them.

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Your mother was right they are necessary. Yes most women cant kill spiders my sisters call me a killer because I can. Thank you for the review

Sheer Terror

[Weeping willow]

Spiderwebs are beautifully woven by such a small little creature,yet its web can reach large spaces.
Nicely expressed ;-] Although I'm not one who cares for spiders.

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

I am not a fan of spiders, they are like having a tiny terrorist in your house. However they are a necessary part of nature. Thank you for taking the time to read and review

Sheer Terror

[Pete]

an amazing thing with life lessons for us all. so intricate those silk webs and so sticky and entangling. then they are are so patient whilst waiting for their catch to perish. very creative how you structured the stanzas like a web. cool write that drew me into the web. hope you're not a black widow ... :)

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Pete, a spider is just a spider ... right. Funny the first draft of this is actually a poetic tale of a spider taking residence in a ladies house. she is terrified of the spider cannot kill it and she ends up stalking and menacing the spider. I am crazy with the edits it is now just a terrifying little spider. Black widow never, wild fickle heart .. sometimes. Thank you for the great review.

Sheer Terror

[Davidgeo]

The last stanza is poorly written.

Your rhyme scheme is on point though.

But seriously, edit this thing.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the spiders. We need them. No spiders, bugs would overtake us. Wonderful use of description and I liked the artwork. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Coyote you are right about the spiders and they are very cool to watch. For most people they cause such the fear and dread making the tiniest spider such a terrorist. Thank you for the great review.

Sheer Terror

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Edizen]

This is a wonderful poem, it brings out a sense of dread and fear, and also a sense of marveling wonder, something akin to admiration. It portrays a spider perfectly and it is well written. keep it up

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Edizen, I thank you for such a wonderful review and taking the time to read.

Sheer Terror

[Edizen]

You are most welcome

[wordman]

great images,the poem could mean a lot of things to me,but taking it at face value tells me something is
preying on the unaware

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Wordman, the menacing little creature brings such fears. Thank you for your review.

Sheer Terror

[wordman]

you`re welcome