INSATIABLE

" I am intrigued like a moth to a flame "

   the need to cross over lines

no hands on the steering wheel

the sharpest knife in the drawer

that’s where I wrote your number

love that white knuckle grip

enhances the blood splatter

my silhouette breaks the pattern

slipping past wicked

sporting sinister head to toe

face shadowed in a hoodie

breadcrumbs from a new honey

a fork in the road, indeed

perfect setting for a feast of thieves

the dining is divine

anticipation appetizer

catching fire to a grand desire

cold sweat against the brow

a heartbeat in a chase and prowl

fuels the need to free a hunter

as a girl paces the floor

longing for my boy next door

fresh blood trickling down my arms

requires no attention

my new sweet has choosen

he will be mine only

pitch black remembers fondly

untwisting every light bulb

part of my game

time to play

his scent still lingers

waking intrigue like a moth to a flame

screams in a blaze

insisting that I cut

that I set them free

their frightful eyes

trapped by my beautiful webs

dreaming darker

embracing the bad seed

escaped from a dying breed

with a psychopath need

drowning in the land of milk and honey

Terry D'Arcy-Ryan

 

                                                                 

Author's Note

* A very special thanks to "Caffeinated me" for editing and once again pulling me in off the ledge. It really is a beautiful view. Thank you for reading and God Bless

Sheer Terror

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful phpto and tempting/wonderful words. I had to read again. The words were alive and meaningful. Thank you my friend for sharing poem. I liked this one.
Coyote

[Jamieya B-Johnson]

Nice!! I can't say enough!

[DoormanDan]

I'll start off by saying that I like the images you included with this piece. They add to it.

Anyway, onwards to the review! I'll start with the positives. For starters, you paint some good imagery here, which definitely does augment the poem's menacing vibe.

However, there are a few things that don't feel quite right with this. One, the fragmented stylization of the writing is too prevalent here for this to be as impactful as it could be. Also, that same fragmented style makes it hard for readers to easily follow along with what you're trying to convey sometimes, especially in the middle portion of the poem.

To reiterate, your poem displays some nice imagery, which helps to generate the lyrical atmosphere you desired, but in your apparent effort to keep the lines concise, your poem's grammar and fluent story-telling has suffered slightly. I hope my review is of some help. Good luck, and keep on writing! :)

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Dan, I do appreciate your in depth review. I like to write in the fragmented, jumping quickly to the next thought. I work at the imagery in words. I can actually get lost in it and I do lose perspective often. When I read this yesterday I was thinking in a similar way as your review. I needed to extend the thought of each line while keeping it relate able. Thank you Dan if you have any specific suggestions feel free.

Sheer Terror

[DoormanDan]

No problem, Sheer Terror. My only suggestion is just focus more on coherence and making sense. Do that, and you'll be fine. :)

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Some of my stuff I write and I stay focused with it turns out fine. I am going to work on this one again. Thank you

[Pete]

nice job. a devilish, daring write that speaks of pushing the envelope, testing limits and living on the edge. careful though, play with fire and get burned. there is a lot to digest in this. not for the faint of heart. thrillseekers must be handled carefully like t.n.t. ...

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Pete, as I never test the limits, I set them. Nothing like the view from the extreme edge, wanted by the bad guys, and the good guys doing 100 in the slow lane. Thank for another outstanding review.

Sheer Terror

[Davidgeo]

i particularly enjoy the short halting lines. If they are assertive enough they do just fine on their own without periods or commas. Some folks would say it's just lazy, I think it's quite the oppositte.

On the content not technical; I've hurt myself too. Like a moth to a white hot bulb, nothing comes of it for more than a few moments. If you live long enough, consciousness becomes painful for all of us regardless. (there's a light at the end of tunnel... and s**t, I swear to god ((and s**t)))

Anyway, I enjoyed this.

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

I am always thrilled when a writer such as yourself give such a detailed review. Thank you

Sheer Terror

[KCthelastboyscout]

You and I really are connected.we're both drawn to the ledge.and your picture is much more captivating than mine.even though it's considered weak to give up on life I still believe it takes courage to climb up to the ledge in the first place

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

The ledge comes with a Spectacular view and a mesmerizing temptation luring you to stay in the wake above mankind, the simplest of desires to no longer claim the human species and a belief you can surely fly. There is a crafty path I have dented deep making my way to this view. My son( Caffeinated.me ) seems to always know when to pull me back in, and for that I am eternally grateful. Thank you KC I really do appreciate the
great review and the witty banter.

Sheer Terror

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we are drawn to death like a bee to honey...or caught up in the drama like a fly in a web...yelling "help me" even though we flew into it of our own accord.
deep, dark write...shades of Sexton.
j.

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Of our own accord, no truer words have been spoken. Thank you for reading and leaving a review.
read moreOf our own accord, no truer words have been spoken. Thank you for reading and leaving a review.

Sheer Terror

[Paul Bell]

The view is stunning.
If this is what coffee does do you. I want in.
Superb lines running through this dark write.
Come into my parlour says the spider to the fly.
I'm going in, and i know what happens.
Is this why us guys are dumb.
How does she kill them.

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

As their darkness, that is how she kills them. We all contain a darkness, it is always with us. Like your shadow only hiding in your head. Maybe its not your head and quite as big as the figure you see out the corner of your eye, standing over you as your slumber. Always there, how you feed your darkness is how the darkness will come for you. I love up close and personal, "the sharpest knife in the drawer" and the ultimate prize " blood trickling down my arms" however life is imperfect this often does not work out. Men, and all that brute strength, poisoning is the no fuss no mess answer. Unless of course you are a fair match to my bad a*s and then I am all about choking you at your weakest, during sleep or sex.
So, how do you feed your darkness?

Sheer Terror

[Paul Bell]

I spent a lot of years hiding in the dark. Glad I never met you. The night can be a comfort. Once you get used to the different noises, that is. Would I like to go during sleep or sex. Got to be sex. You can enter hell with a smile. lol

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

The images of heaven and hell have been imprinted in our brain through a lifetime of conditioning. Delusion, a false idea. Sure knowing how this works out can be comforting. Do you really believe in the end, what make us magnificent down to science itself, will play out with Judgement, Forgiveness and a Devilish creature of morphing ability biding stakes on our souls.

Sheer Terror

[Paul Bell]

Must be why i gave up religion.

[wordman]

a deep write terry,emotional,border line suicideal,crumbs from a new love,just enough to keep you hanging on,great images

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Wordman, I am always happy to see review and I am glad you like it. You Rock !!

Sheer Terror

[wordman]

you`re welcome