HAMMER on METAL

" thunder is envious of lightnings perfect hit hammer on metal as the gods crack their whip "

                     

man kneels in honor

dubbed hammer for the god's of war

creating his place in a hum and rattle

tracks time to a worthy rival

renders a flash in the sky

we fall and fly

lost inside our own battle cry

hammer on metal produces this metallic sound

agony’s pleasure just beyond

again and over the echo responds

calling us home while blinding us profound

a cue recurs

passes over our ears

a crown for a target

the single shot

a blind round

quicker than quick we are enamored

one finger on the trigger

chosen for one

all ages can be a player

the rules have come undone

to beat a new order

the next train

jumps the tracks

a chain snaps back

releases a bullet named terror

this bedlam competes

within the sound of conflict

lives just past bliss's hitch

tattooed with metals ink

engraved skin

feels pains true kiss

thunder is envious

for lightnings perfect hit

hits hammer on metal

as the gods crack their whip

Sheer Terror

aka Terry D'Arcy-Ryan

                                                                                  

Author's Note

I must give a special thanks to "Caffeinatedme" for editing and helping me off that ledge what can I say I'm drawn to the spectacular view. Nothing but Love !

Reviews

[Weeping willow]

Wow! beautifully expressed,as darkness hides within it,also conveys love;-]

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Weeping Willow thank you for the outstanding review

Sheer Terror

[Ayushi Jha]

BEAUTIFUL! The intricacy of the thoughts that this poem is trying to convey is so beautifully knitted that I am struck. Loved it!

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Ayushi Jha, it makes me happy when anyone gets my writing. Thank you for the Stellar review.

Sheer Terror

[Coyote Poetry]

Photos and words. Outstanding.
"man kneels in grace
he is hammer for the god's of war
creating his place with a hum and rattle
time is man's finest driven enemy
a flash in the sky
we fall and fly lost inside our own battle cry"
You took the reader with you to realistic places and I liked the above lines. The poem hard, direct and true. What poetry support to be. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Coyote, what a strong and motivating review.
Thank you so much

Sheer Terror

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Nipplegrinder]

Fantastic piece of writing.
In all the darkness of this, I spotted a singular line of beauty.
"in a place found just past bliss's hitch"
Even though that's a dark line, it's really gorgeous.

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

I am pleased you found beauty here I thank you for an outstanding review

Sheer Terror

[Relic]

This is pretty advanced writing and covered in imagination and skill.

Great writing. I hope to reach your level someday. :)

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Relic, thank you for a stellar review

Sheer Terror

[apennylate]

The last verse cracks it home, but the whole thing...

*this bedlam competes with the sound of conflict
in a place found just past bliss's hitch
tattooed with metals ink my engraved skin feels pains true kiss*

... And many others... You fabricate such distinct patterns, and an almost thick feeling of realism...

I do not have the depth of self to confront the issues you do in your writing... The ledge is too deep for me... Strongly penned...

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Silente, again I am floored by your Superb review.
The ledge comes with a Spectacular view and a mesmerizing temptation luring you to stay in the wake above mankind, the simplest of desire to no longer claim the human species and a belief you can surely fly. There is a crafty path I have dented deep though my boy (my son Caffeinated.me ) knows how to find me. With that I say thank you for the Superb words of praise they resonate especially profound as I have read your work and you are of a well defined Talent.

Sheer Terror

[apennylate]

I would love to believe I could fly... My flesh has not the wings for it... I was of the same kin yesterday... Tons of caffeine, aha... I am glad you found meaning in my words, hopefully half as much meaning as I found in this poem... My pleasure, and happy writing days ahead...!

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Yes, always happy writing I write for me its like therapy. Damn, that sounds so cliche but it is all about setting something free .... thank you again gotta go working on a witch hunt.

Sheer Terror

[apennylate]

Enjoy yourself, and be safe... Witches are notorious for the pointy ends... Being cliche is a matter of perspective... If a bad writer says writing is therapy, then it is cliche... However if an excellent writer says it is therapy for them... Then it is not cliche in the slightest. A fine line exists, but it does exist. Hah

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Oh, I see .... the one keeping genius separated of a insanity. I do appreciate the words of confidence and witty banter. No worries about pointy all weapons put away, I'm the one they chase ..just love the sport of it. Haha

[apennylate]

Sporty witch-hunting... Could be a new thing... Hah

[Raven Moonchild]

The depth of your work continues to astound me, dear. Absolutely brilliant!!! :D

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Hey Raven Moonchild , what an amazing review I than you.

Sheer Terror

[BBP]

The title drew me in and your words kept me chained to it... you explained the chairs of humanity so elegantly yet with a greasy edge. Really dig this one.

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

BBP, Man can be a creator of incredible acts and beauty and Man has the capacity to be the envy of evil itself. What is truly in a Man's heart that is what we look to see. I do appreciate the stellar review and I thank you for taking the time.

Sheer Terror

[Re-Pete]

love the way this reads. gem after gem. words conjure potent imagery. there is a sly, sarcastic aggression between the lines. powerful tagline. pics outstanding. all as i've come to expect. this one no exception. outstanding ...

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Pete, and here I thought I was subtle ha ha. I wrote this to be subjective letting it be molded by the reader. Your review is outstanding thank you Pete

Sheer Terror

[ROXANE DORSEY]

. love this nice piece and thanks for sharing.

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Roxane, I am glad you like it thank you

Sheer Terror