The Fog

Can you see through the fog

As darkness takes the day

when the growing sea mist

Troubles your way

Hang on to life's Precious ground 

Walking only by the path

Dare you go another way

Creeping like a cat

Reviews

[TheUnrulyWriter]

This reminds me of the symbolism in Lord of the Rings. The path they followed was the only safe route through the forest.

Slightly off-topic, but have you ever published a book of your writings? I think it would do really well, and I would certainly be interested in purchasing one!!

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Your words give me such encouragement thank you. I am still surprised I was so Lucky.

[Michael S]

Can you see through the fog
As darkness takes the day
when the growing sea mist
Troubles your way
Hang on to life's Precious ground
Walking only by the path
Dare you go another way
Creeping like a cat.......

Intriguing and beautiful lines, Sheer Kind :-)
Short, Sweet and simple...Hang on to life's precious ground says it all, deep and inspiring.Troubles cannot make you stop, you have to keep on going in the path of life. I love the title too.
Great one! :-) :-)

[Adam Adams]

quite interesting.

the depth of darkness be well pondered into the chum of such carving words. liked the way how amazingly you dripped this down, & fascinatingly covered with the ply of your thoughts around. nicely penned. short. simple-yet-realistic. philosophically dramatic poetry it is. great job!

[queenR]

this is actually art..beautiful play of words u got there..

[Cody Mitchell]

This poem seems mystifying. A little short, wish it was longer. It seems to tell of life unpredictable nature. What will the fog reveal? Although I'm not sure your movie for writing, it is fun to look at life as unpredictable because a man of cells said life is like a box of chocolates, you never know what your gonna get.