Looking Back Mirror

Lil’ bud of rose

 Inside’s bruise

 

Each petals that bloom

Is a Butterfly’s gloom

 

It’s thorns can’t bleed

Of the stems that greed

 

The roots that caged

Of the years that aged

The rose that waits

In the withers gate

 

 Picked by a hand

Of a rose once on land

 

Watered with tears

Survived for years

 

The rose once bud

Isn’t the  rose on the mud.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Stephen]

Great poem. Lot of sadness. But I felt the emotions in the writing and that is a trait of a good writer, whenever they are able to bring out of people the same emotions the writer is wanting to express. Awesome work!

[SheenLeigh]

Yes, I'm kinda emotional in writing this. Glad it mirrored my emotions. thank you very much.

[Stephen]

No problem

[realmwriter]

Beautiful, dirty sadness. Nicely done.

[SheenLeigh]

thank you very much

[realmwriter]

You are very welcome.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked how you used the rose to create place and sadness. You took the reader into deep thoughts with a sad ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[SheenLeigh]

hmm. hi thanks. but yeah others may the ending was sad and i didn't even know how should I end this poem... i feel like something is missing somewhere

[Coyote Poetry]

It had a good ending. You create places and situation. Hard to find a happy ending sometimes.

[SheenLeigh]

you think so? thanks coyote is that your name? thank you very much

[Coyote Poetry]

Just my writer name. Real name is John. I started using Coyote many years ago. Hard to lose now.

[SheenLeigh]

oh, yeah sometimes I think i should have a pen name but i think pen names are for real writers like you. :)) john a nice name.,

[Coyote Poetry]

I used Coyote because. My poetry is a lot about politics. I didn't want family to suffer for my opinions. Words can get you in trouble. Kids are older. I do use my real name now.

[SheenLeigh]

like what lang leav have said that " it was words i fell for. in the end it was words that broke my heart. truly words are powerful, it has certian responsibilities connected to it i think. hahaha i'm too young to know.

[Coyote Poetry]

Wisdom can be learn young. Good books teach us what is right and wrong.

[SheenLeigh]

and good poetry . glad i have found this site i have learned a lot of wisdom from people around the world. thou i know my poetry not as good i still post it, this page really inspires me.

[Coyote Poetry]

Writing is constant learning. I have been writing for 42 years and I'm still learning.

[SheenLeigh]

I'm still 20 still a long way to go.

[Coyote Poetry]

20 is a good year. I hope you have time to travel, test life and have some fun. The best days of a life is when you are young and not locked in.

[SheenLeigh]

will do . thank you, i should go . i have a class bye. thank you for your time

[Coyote Poetry]

Good night.