Have a taste

This is a very prersonal and extremely honest piece. This is what flows through my head when I'm with someone special. This is my depth, my lowest circle of hell. This is me and many of us.

Well hello there, handsome

wanna  cause some trouble? 

I know you aren’t that type of guy, 

but you can trust me, 

I can make your dreams come true " 

Especially the ones you won’t even admit to yourself. 

I might look like a nightmare, 

But don’t worry about that, 

you’ll beg me not to wake up. 

So take a deep breath, stretch your muscles

and get ready for the beginning of your end. 

Don’t be scared,  baby

I know this isn’t easy, 

we can both lose

but isn’t that the purpose of it all? 

So have a seat at my theater, 

Lemme take charge now

Just observe and absorb my dance

With your madness. 

Have a taste of my disaster

Roll the emotions on your tongue

Like a vintage wine

Have a bite of my spine, 

As I strip you down from your body.  

Author's Note

Lemme know what you think! I'll love you

Reviews

[GalaxyGhost]

I like the narrator's voice because it has sass and bold or daring tone like Scarlets O'Hara.

[PoeticSorcery]

the heat you'll cause most men in this poem is likely to melt the ice caps.

[sheandherself]

Ah, if only it worked on dudes I know. Thank you, I apprecaite that. xx

[PoeticSorcery]

I often wish I could use poetry like this on girls I know, so I know where you're coming from lol. and you're welcome m'lady

[Davidgeo]

I know this poem. Not because I've read it before. I know this emotion. I've felt this.

It's sounds a lot better than it looks, feels good, but... it feels really good.

But I'm sure I'm confused. Happens a lot to fellas like me.

https://youtu.be/jPIU_B0iD5Y

[sheandherself]

The first 4 senteces are literally the goal of a poem, a mark of completing the purpose of it. Means so much to me I cannot explain. Oh my God, thank you so, so much. xx

[LostBoy]

Oh I let u know now: soul striptease. I throw it back at you: hello there handsome wanna cause some trouble? Ur words are good company.

[sheandherself]

Soul striptease sounds amazing.
✌

[Ben Barton]

Ahoj! This is some damn good poetry. You've conjured up some delightful imagery - "Have a taste of my disaster// Roll the emotions on your tongue" is probably my favourite line, closely followed by "We both can lose*, but isn't that the purpose of it all?" So true. For someone who isn't a native English speaker, your use of English here is pretty much perfect. I really, really enjoyed reading this. Keep on writing! :)

*"We both can lose" should probably be written as "We can both lose" or "We could both lose" - but seriously, it doesn't even matter. The rest of the poem is too damn good.

[sheandherself]

Ahhhh thank you so much for kind words! What a nice comment, I'd frame it lol.
Also thanks for the correction, imma fix that.

[Ben Barton]

Haha, my pleasure. Couldn't read something this good and not let the writer know how good it was. You've got a talent for stringing words together; wield it like a sword, and never stop swinging.

[Dez H.]

Girl you have such way with words that you could possibly talk your way into running this world one day. I love your works you can put words together like Legos. Beautifully wrote and seductive. Girl you are the s**t

[sheandherself]

When I'm in charge of everything I swear you're my assistant as soon as I get the position, lol. Thank you is not enough for you rooting for me. xoxo

[Dez H.]

You know I got your back shorty.