In the right place at the right time

This is one of the things I miss the most abut being in a relationship.

the universe is falling apart
my heart is gonna explode
my body is shaking
head's pounding
you lean closer to me
tears in my eyes
get faster
I cannot inhale
and my soul doesn't work
you look into my eyes
i can see yous
i can smell you
i breathe you in
my heart slows down
my whole being slows down
everything's getting just fine
our galaxy put itself in place
there's heaven in your mouth
give me some
I can feel gallons of my own blood
in my own veins
all the blood I've ever had
my whole life is flashing in front of my eyes
all my little deaths make sense
every second of our existence
is in me
and then
the time suddenly stops
all I can feel is myself
in you
and you
in me
and I know
even if our very own planet
got destroyed right now
in this moment
I wouldn't even know
because I'm here
you're here
and if I were to die right now
I'd die in the right time, at the right place.

Author's Note

This was super-fast. The idea just popped in my head and my hand was writing by itself.
This is the feeling worth it all.

Reviews

[...Relic...]

This type of activity will often lead to a whirlwind of emotions vividly reproduced through the breath as well as the heart. Like a reflection of desire, it overwhelms the senses.

A super-fast poem yes, but that seems to mimic what you were feeling in a way doesn't it?

Well done.

Relic.

[sheandherself]

Thank you. Xx

[😂]

Musta been great ! :D

[sheandherself]

Yeah, it was pretty cool.

[😂]

im glad !

[M]

this is really good and it kinda made me sad because it reminded me of the boy i am in love with. when we were together i used to lay with him and breathe in his scent. and i miss it. no matter how upset i got with him, i never could stay that way for long because i just felt so at peace with him.

[sheandherself]

Same here, girl. Guess we as people aren't that different afterall. Thank you for kind words and sharing your piece. xx

[Insight "MH"]

When the right people come in our lives, they seem like air being everywhere which we truly need and cannot live without.

[AaronFreitas]

I like this one my friend :) Sometimes in life everything just feels right. It feels like we are in the exact place at the exact moment we are meant to be there. I can totally relate to that feeling and I too miss the feeling, wishing I had that someone special to feel that way about. I enjoyed your words :)

[Dez H.]

Girl you can write things that'll make a man's mind go wild. I love the way you use your words; so exquisitely done and a perfect way of letting your readers know just how your mind is breaking every breath you take. I love it and I know ive probably said it before but you are s**t.
-007

[andrew mitchell]

This read with fast flowing velocity in an excellent poem just like the craziness when in love lol

[misterfebus]

Wonderful poem.
I've missed the nuances
of relationship and it
lasted many years -
now turned to dreams
and misunderstandings, but
die today knowing I was love.

thanks, sheandherself

[alifeacoustic]

Perfectly capturing the intensity, confusion and craziness of love, that rolled into one, somehow works its intoxicating magic on us all.
Great write.

[Keli C]

This beautiful poem whispers love, such a beautiful thought. If the world would end you wouldn't know because you are in his arms. That sounds so nice. Very beautiful poem.