Soul

Lips as black as a ravens feather

Eyes as cold as the winters weather

Hair as smooth as midnight's mist

Heart as passionate as a lovers kiss

Mind as complicated as an abstract piece

And her soul empties as we decease

She lies beneath the radiant surface

Hidden between the sun scorched lilies

And obscured by the calm winds ripples

Scarce and fleeting on the ocean floor

Yet she soars above the clouds

Gazing through the eyes of a elegant bird

Feathers ruffled, wings spread wide

A brown speck on the vast blue sky

But too soon she becomes

A flightless bird in a branchless tree

Plummeting to the dew spattered ground

Landing softly, turning to ash

Running with nimble legs and a chin held high

She dances along the rivers shore

Spinning in circles and stirring the air

Tapping her feet, disturbing the sand

Rain drops fall to the earth

And to she careens through the sky

A jewel so stunning, so brilliant

Shattering to pieces in the slightest moment

She is the thoughts we think

She is the breath we breathe

She is the song we sing

She is the heart

And we are the soul

Author's Note

I hope you like it, please leave a review below telling me what you liked (If anything) and what can be improved. But all comments are appreciated! :)

Reviews

[Leslie Philibert]

What I really like here is the imagery...great first verse.

[Corset]

It's very lovely, the feelings of vulnerability the joy of love on upstretched reach, it's makes me think the "she" is perhaps our earth mother, very nice poetry.

[BrynnaW.]

The imagery was absolutely beautiful. I could see everything you described very clearly. There was so much thought involved in this and it shows that you worked really hard to put this together to make it flow and really sound like the wonderful masterpiece it is. It was my favorite of the contest and rightfully won first place. A vivid read that I enjoyed very much. Congratulations and keep on writing!

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

I actually liked everything about it. The poem had a good flow, very descriptive... it looks like you really put time and effort into it. It's also very creative, and I find it deep. I love it from beginning to end. Very good write.

[R.A. Youngblood]

This is so emotional and i like your flow of thoughts and imagery!
I specially like the ending!
Thanks for sharing...Well done :D

[Balance]

"Running with nimble legs and a chin held high
She dances along the rivers shore
Spinning in circles and stirring the air
Tapping her feet, disturbing the sand"

Very nice image. I like the style, with lines such as "Hidden between the sun scorched lilies". Keep on the good work!

[SlightlyOdd]

I like this it leaves me the impression of a tragedy we all should carry on the imagery in this is wonderful imagery seems to be a strength i like the way you structured it overall 92/100

[Skye]

Beautiful, the description is so vivid, i love the first lines the most, wonderful!

[Owlgirl]

Amazing, almost ticking hearbeat like flow. Amazing imagery, very well written. I love it.

[Chip]

Wow another good piece! Was really easy to read. Well done!