Silence

Darkness envelops me,

Alone for the night,

So I bask in an eerie silence,

A deafening silence,

Alone for the night,

As darkness envelops me

Author's Note

I don't know, it's kind of a work in progress but sort of not. Please help me!!

Reviews

[Monica]

This is your work in progress?!? Impressed. My work in progress is generally not that put together :) I like it, it's simple but makes a statement.
I think this is a good write.

[devon]

This is very good for a work in progress!

I suggest adding a stanza speaking about coming from the darkness or something. I'm not sure which direction you want this poem to go...

[Distant horizons]

Well....i hate giving opinions on how to change writes, but one thing did strike me. I don't know if it will help, but if you leave line 4 where it is but also copy it into after line 2, the lines would mirror each other throughout. but I think its fine the way it is.