One Last Kiss

The soft grass between my fingers,

The bright blue sky and fluffy white clouds,

The sun brightly shining,

On such a marvellous day as this

I turn onto my side, 

Caressing the greenery,

Gazing into the pool of sparkling water,

Reflecting the suns rays on its surface

A tear rolls down my cheek,

As I try to connect with him one more time,

Channelling my energy, my love,

And pushing it through the soil

I put my chin in my hand,

Lying once more on my stomach,

And trace the letters on the stone,

With my fragile shaking fingers

And that's when it hits me,
He's gone,
Not coming back,
Never again to return to my arms

I let out a cry of agony,
Forcing the pain out of my system,
I want it to leave and never come back,
But this is a wish no sorcerer can grant

Once more I howl, basking in true sorrow,
One unlike any I had ever felt before,
So powerful I wouldn't wish it on anyone,
Even the cruellest of people

My breath becomes ragged,
I find myself gasping for air,
Trying to regain composure,
But to no avail

I get a hold of myself,
Bunching up the grass in my fist,
Digging my nails into my palms,
When I loose myself once more

I throw my body at the tomb stone,
Screaming, screaming for him to come back,

Screaming,
I need you, I want you, I love you

But he can't hear me,
His body lying lifeless under six feet of rock,
Trapped inside a coffin,
Left to rot

I begin to dig,
Pulling out the grass in clumps,
Scraping away layers of dirt with my bare nails,
The emotional and physical pain too much to bare

Nothing will lie between me and him,

Nothing will stop me,
Nothing...
Nothing

But then I hear his voice,
Stop! He yells, over and over,

Stop! He cries to me and I continue to dig,

Stop!

Now I lay on my back,
Gazing into the eyes of my 'him',
I study is face, a hallucination for sure,
As he pulls me in for one last kiss

Author's Note

Liked it? Suggestions? Please review! Ps. This is based loosely (seriously loosely) on my story Recoil.

Reviews

[Aehr]

I can literally feel the pain and thrill the girl here is feeling. It just made me really sad. This is a wonderful piece. Gotta shelve it!

[BLBrown]

Anyone who has ever lost a close loved one will understand your pain which you've bravely written about here.

The starkness of your description of where his physical body is left to rot, and how that overwhelms you so that you try to dig your way down to him, I can see it.

Good job.

[Cathy Wattam]

Firstly, let me say this is a cracking poem. Great story flowing from beginning to end. I think you've done a superb job with it, I could really feel your pain and emotion. Well done.

A few minor issues, if I may? :-

"Reflecting the sun's rays"
"When I lose myself once more"
"Emotional and physical pain too much to bear"
"I study his face"

Sorry, I can't help it. Aside from those, a wonderful poem.

[AK]

Very nice! Really powerful:)

[Josh Arcelo]

Very mature writing style, excellent flow. less whining and more description which is always good.

[Chip]

Very well written, shows the fight very well!

[CollapsedThoughts]

Very nicely written. Very emotional and powerful. :)

[$êlvån]

Deep and emotional...fight with present and past memories all shown in perfect way:)

[Lily Mae]

I really love it.. deep unrequited love.. The end where in hallucination there is one final kiss..wow ..very powerful..xo

[Leslie Philibert]

What I really like is the way the poem shifts it´s mood, from the almost angelic first lines to the real despair of the last lines, not an easy thing to do, but well done. I also think the first two lines are tremendous, love fluffy and the very visual intro, like a children`s book, good writing.