Fade Into The Shadows

Adapted to a way of life,

Denying the truth,

As I fade into the shadows,

Where no one can hear,

No one can see

For just a moment,

I believe for the better,

As I fade into the shadows,

Where no one can hear,

No one can see

I become invisible,

No eyes bare upon me,

As I fade into the shadows,

Where no one can hear,

No one can see

Choking on the pain,

Becomes too much to bear,

As I fade into the shadows,

Where no one can hear,

No one can see

Author's Note

This started off as a monologue but that was a fail, so I have this instead. Hope you enjoyed.

Reviews

[Allan Eddings]

The first piece of yours I have read, and I must say if the rest of your pieces are half as good as this I am going to enjoy myself immensely. You can see the origins of the poem, as a monologue, in how it addresses the reader; you can almost see the actor with outstretched hand upon dimly lit stage uttering these words in such despair! Wonderful.

The tempo of the piece is insistent throughout but it does not overpower the imagery, which is good, for the imagery is beautiful. I had these delightful pictures of the narrator of this piece slowly receding into the shadows off the stage as they read this to us. The whole piece seemed an epitaph.

The sentiments are admirable as well and I think can be taken many ways. For instance is this a piece penned by someone who has denied an elemental part of them, and their fading into the shadows is their acceptance by society? Or is it the final words of a person realising that their life has been a waste, that they denied so much of existence, of life, that now at the end it is too much much to bear? Two of just so many wonderful interpretations, simply beautiful.

So I shall desist my ramblings and say bravo! And please do keep writing, for I would hate to exhaust your oeuvre.

Regrads,
A.E.

[Alana McGuire]

I really enjoy the pure emotion you put into this. It makes an open door to feel the emotions you put into it. I also really enjoy the repetition at the end of each stanza. I'm usually not a fan of a something repeated that much, but you really made it work. Very wonderful! :)

[Luciole]

This was very unique and emotional, I really liked its quirkiness :)

[Distant horizons]

Your writes say so much in so few words.. First verse says everything. Marveliscious :-)

[Never-Sane]

Great stanzas and i like your last to lines in each stanza

[Aravind]

Wonderful energy shown through your flow.

Symmetrical stanza length, and great imagery. The endings repeated throughout are an awesome way to reinfore your main message and image. Worked really well, just missing a period after "see"