Into The Dark Abyss

Smoke rises with,

Ash, spark, and flame,

Gone with a whisper,

Alone she came,

Fueled by darkness,

Profound, deathly shame

Put into deep misery,

Theft of the soul,

Once you've been taken,

Never shall you be whole,

For the Taker,

Is out of your control

She shall cast desolation,

No light on you will shine,

All the terror she brings upon,

She'll be sure to cross the line,

And not only your inner self,

Your body she shall confine

Never again,

Shall you roam free,

Trapped with her forever,

For eternity,

To do nothing is what you will,

For she shall dismiss your plea

Then she shall watch,

With pleasure, with bliss,

Rotting on your own,

Until you no longer exist,

When you mutter your last words,

And fall into the dark abyss

Author's Note

There are some rhythm problems, I apologize. I hope it's still okay though.

Reviews

[StruckByLightning]

The poem has good rhymes, and it's meaning is profoundly deep. I really liked it.

[Aravind]

Nice rhyme maintained. (try not to force it at certain places)...

Dark, very dark! Perfect imagery with a delicate subject.

[Distant horizons]

Deep and dark write. Captured the haunting feel well.
Totally Chillerific. :-)

[FuzzyNapkin]

Really liked it.