A Weight On My Chest

A poem.

I have a walrus
sitting on my chest,
its tusks digging into
my hips
and its tail flopping
far out of
reach.

Its weight presses
on my throat
and my tears get trapped
inside.
I want to scream
but I can't
and I can't lift this weight

off my chest.

Author's Note

I took me such a long time to remember how to spell weight... I'm ashamed of myself.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

I like this write alot. Wonderful indeed...:)

[SlightlyOdd]

A walrus you say, dear me!

[Jamie Cook]

Haha don't feel bad it took me forever to remember how to spell "rain". ...I spelled that right, right? Ohmygawd!
ANYWAYS awesome poem it was short and cute and just lovely and I almost suffocated believing there was a walrus on my chest but then I realized it was just my fat cat. AWESOME JOB! :D

[Mr.Cardigan]

this is awesome and i could picture it which is a sight i dont want to see but its a great write

[Dr. Wood ?]

a great way of putting it..using the walrus........good job the carpenter wasn't with him...Great poem

[SheActsLikeSummer]

:) Thank you.

[G!o]

I love the picture, the choice of words and how you have tackled this theme creatively. It's full of originality and that makes it really scream. Written amazingly. I love it!

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Thank you so much, I really appreciate it. :)

[C.C. Marx]

Great work, I think a walrus was the perfect fit for this poem......how much do those suckers weigh?? Must be a lot

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Ha ha. Yeah. I just looked it up: the male on average weighs 2,000 lbs. I think I would die. :) Anyway, thank you so much.

[C.C. Marx]

Haha oh lord! And my pleasure!! Ps I like your profile name, that's a favorote song of mine

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Thanks :) I love it too.

[C.C. Marx]

I saw the name and I was like hmmm shes a clever one haha

[SheActsLikeSummer]

:) Well thank you. I take pride in my cleverness.

[C.C. Marx]

As you should hard to find people like that these days

[Buniheart]

Such a good metaphorical poem!! And i think picking a walrus was a perfect choice because of all the symbolic inferences you can make with its anatomy!

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Thank you. It really means a lot.

[Skye]

Love this! Amazing as always

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Thanks so much. I'm really glad you liked it.

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

A very different metaphor. Interesting. Gets the feeling across.
I think when you wrote "its tucks" perhaps you meant "tusks"?

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Ha ha, yeah, sorry about that. I completely missed it. Thanks. :)