In the End

First it's ink.

Jet black, taking over

the edges of your vision

It starts in the corners

spirals like frost

and leaves you blind.

Then it's sludge.

Think and heavy making

every step a challenge

and every breath

almost impossible

as it traps your lungs.

After that it's persuasive.

Powerful and overwhelming

it doesn't hurt anymore

it forces you to believe

that you can't fight it,

you will lose.

In the end it's alive.

Clawing at you

Whispering to you

Wanting you to fall.

Because eventually,

you will.

You lose your footing

and take the plunge

into the ever growing

ever deepening

darkness of the end.

Author's Note

Reviews?

Reviews

[Cole Hayley]

This is so good. My favortie from you. The downward spiral, or so it seems? Depression?

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Thanks so much, I'm really glad you enjoyed it. And yeah, that's what I was aiming at but it's what you see that matters, not what it was intended to be. :)

[SamanthaDanielle]

I really loved this! Your word choice is wonderful and your expression of struggle is phenomenal.

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Ha ha thanks, you made that rhyme. :) Or, at least, part rhyme. Either way, love your word choice. Thanks again.

[Lily Mae]

Life sludge..there is nothing worse.. You really did a great job expressing the depth and levels of struggle..xo

[SheActsLikeSummer]

:) Thank you.

[Phoenix]

Very Nice!

[SheActsLikeSummer]

thank you!

[Leslie Philibert]

Good write, that uses enigma to good effect, leaves interpretaion open and so achieves a universal, threatening kind of feeling, good one.

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Thank you so much, I really appreciate it.

[New Dawn]

Is this an addiction - certainly could be applied to the various stages of a growing addiction. Intense and captivating write.

[SheActsLikeSummer]

That never actually occured to me while I was writing the piece but yeah, that makes sense. :) Thank you.

[G!o]

Beautifully melancholic. I like the effect that it has, like you are trying to peel off from a part of you that can't let you go. Lovely writing as always.

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Thanks so much, I really, really appreciate it.

[MoriartyMesa]

I take away something that reminds me of The Beatles. not sure why.

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Something I wrote reminded you of the Beatles?? Wow. That's amazing. Thank you so much.

[SlightlyOdd]

this is very sad, dark, and reminds me of the song by Linkin Park. I like how each stanza seems to be a sentence, great I like the imagery that comes with it as well if i would suggest anything it would be that you put a couple of spaces in between the lines ever deepening and darkness of the end you don't have to it's just a suggestion. Otherwise really great job I enjoyed this poem.
96/100

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Thanks so much. I really appreciate it. :) I'll look into it, thanks.

[SlightlyOdd]

welcome