It rains

Last night I had a dream

You called to wish me

And told me our fight was just a lie

To surprise me

 

There you told me everything was alright

While we walked the lake of dreams

Bruno Mars sang to us

And we were at last at ease

 

I woke up to see rain

And pinches of bitter cold

They seemed to affect me

Now that I was wide awake

 

I thought we had each other’s back

You obviously don’t have mine

Frosty bits seemed to pierce me

Since you took away that love

 

Did you notice?

It rains everyday

Like we always thought

That it would when things would be over between us

Author's Note

Well I had a fight with my best friend around my birthday,so I was feeling a bit down and came up with this.

Reviews

[David Scott]

I like the images here and I really can connect with the last stanza. Briliant idea here. I did not feel the meter and without rhym either I found it hard to get any feel for how to read this. Maybe it is me, but for my taste, I would like to see the same idea with some more work to make it "sing" the sad lament off the page.
Very nice emotional exposure here.
Be well.

[Infinite hexes]

yeah I'm sorry, I'm kindof new at writing poems. And also I tried to stick to the truth,its dedicated to me best friend,and we are having a fight,so yeah

[David Scott]

Keep writing! It is a gift to yourself and others.

[Muse]

I thought we had each others back

You obviously don’t have mine

Frosty bits seemed to pierce me

Since you took away that love


and the ending...

It rains everyday

:((

so sad! But very well done. David is right...but if you read this as a prose instead of a poem...it's purrrrrrrrfect!