On Israel

October nights

fresh grapefruit

for tea

and still

you ask me

why

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Friuty short piece with a peal; and now you ask me why?
If I try and merge the title with the lines all I see is this:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CziHrYYSyPc

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

this poem leaves me wondering why
i feel it may need another verse, just to tell us a wee bit more, lol, but others may disagree. i like the mystery here and thanks for entry into my competition!

[Shazbatt969]

Midnight sun
naked swimming
from Russia with …

and still
you ask me
how

[Eilis]

I keep coming back to this poem. Every time I read it it makes me feel like I’m in an arid garden surrounded by wreaths of roses and eating grapefruit half-moons with my hands.

It’s beautifully tangible. But also full of the rebus of so many things left unsaid. Ernest Hemingway poetry.

I don’t know. There’s a depth in all the words you’ve chosen to leave out.

I really like the economy and fragrant palpability of it. That’s the impression it’s making on my mind, anyway. A thing we call poetry.

[Shazbatt969]

Hey, Ellis, love your poetry, thanks for reading, your review is like an English Lit synopsis, A plus, lol, your imagination matches the circumstances almost perfectly, my old English teachers would probably disagree about the poetry part,