Heartace

I  hope your happy

you got what you wanted

Even if it was the cost

of her happiness

she treated you right

but you treated her wrong

she was so blinded by your love

that she didnt understand

day by day

second by second

she was getting hurt more

she deserved better

than a guy b*****d like you

but then again

the day

you broke up with her

was the day this began

all the fighting

between her friends

the day she started

cutting herself

and getting high

again

those things

were her only escape of pain

but really heartace

never goes away

Reviews

[Cynthia]

I love the idea and the story behind the poem! Especially when you cross out the word 'guy' and next to it is a curse word, makes it fun to read! This story is just so cute, blinded by love, how many people is blinded by it? Its so common but yet so tragic.
Nice written!

[Leave me alone....]

this is REALLY good! you could EASLY write a story based on this poem!

[WynterPhoenix]

I could feel the anger in this one. Well written piece.

[Chloe]

This is really good. I would suggest reading through it again and fixing up some of the grammar and tone so that it can flow a little easier. I like where it is going and I see a lot of potential! Keep up the good work!