Girl on the Rocks

An Explanation.

How to begin this explanation of my feelings in your regards?
You're humble and sweet, thoughtful and caring, yet you apparently seem so lost.
Like the blooming tulip, sprouting forth at springtime, you're beauty is utterly enchanting.
Yet, beneath it all, the scars are screaming
The woes of an unseen paradise lost.
My attraction to you is magnetic in its own being,
Pulling like the earth to the sun.
With every word or your every breathing
I'm drawn closer and further from myself.
So young and vibrant you are, seen easily.
Though only you seem to be blind and missing.
If only you viewed as I perceive
You'd know that extent of my sayings.
Tell me now, maiden of my dreaming,
Which deity should I thank for his giving?
I stand in awe of this gift I've received
And wonder in whole it's meaning.
But whose to bite the hand that feeds?
To look the gift horse in the eye?
I am happy for my seconds of being
A friend of a girl on the rocks.

Reviews

[RAOrourke]

I enjoyed your poem, good job!

[Shaun]

Thank you very much.

[Mercy Fae]

Wow. That's amazing. Interesting choice of words as well. I really enjoy your writing

[Shaun]

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Shaun]

I do love the fact, you combine a woman to a flower, especially a tulip :) that has a special meaning to me personally. You write magnetic, and feel all the elements of the earth and beyond in your writing, I can already tell you, you live deep, and precious, there is much more in this write that is beautiful, for those who understand it....

You embrace this person, with whole your heart, and feelings, you give a place of comfort,
Yet, you point out truth, in raw honest ways. I like that.

Your ending is mysteriously beautiful, almost visual, to feel and see this as a rich siluette.

- Elisa :)

[Shaun]

Thank you. I am rather fond of this person in which I have reflected upon. This being stated, I am an honest person, sometimes rather brutally. The person is someone who hasn't the ability to see their self in anyway positive regardless of their obvious beauty. It's kind of a shame, to be honest. But I hope my words may at least plant a seed in their consciousness to maybe begin to change their negative self image.

I like that, better being brutally honest, than vague, and so on and forth. :) It is a kind of a shame in that way... some are lost, and trying to find their ways... I think you did a great job on doing that, and sketch the imagery for all who feel a bit insecure. Well done Shaun. :)

[Shaun]

Thank you very much. Unfortunately, insecurity seems to be the shadow that enjoys looming over us all.

Exactly... it's a shadow, that is there, but without light, there couldn't be one, so, there is always hope... ;) you are very welcome.

[Shaun]

Interesting... I love the fact of pointing out the duality there. That has always been something of interest to me. Opposites. The darks and lights, hots and colds, and so forth... Hmmm I may have some inspiration coming on. :)

Yes, it's a juxtaposition, (chiaro-light - scuro-dark) the perfect duality, balance of what all is. To me too! it's in fact very all in everything around us... inside of us, with us... Yes!! exactly! :) great you have! can't wait to read more! :)