Musing

A sense of restraint, a sense of captivity

Puffs out my energy saved

Being imprisoned within invisible walls

Closing me in on every side

I look at my own reflection

Musing at mystique goings-on

A vague impulse creeping in

Yearning for something that I know not of

Some kind of self-deluding figment of imagination

Or perhaps some whim of a life-time

Sighing to myself I look out of my window

Still night, answering my predicament in silence

Thoughts rippling agitatedly, lashing one on top of the other

Pausing every now and then, but,

My soul relentlessly searching into the fathomless layers of sky

Wanting to look beyond the emptiness

But there as well,

Flashing an electric radiance, a bellowing voice from within

A tug at the heart, something pulling me downward

Something which amidst of all keeping me obtainable

Nonetheless things turn out to be,

For all I know,

I still wait and will do so….

Author's Note

hey ppl :) This is the first poem that i'm publishing :) So you can actually sense the air of a beginner :P Hope you would like it though :) Feel free to leave your comments :) thanks for reading :)

Reviews

[Carlana J.]

Wonderful for your first published poem. I am in a writing workshop, and i beleive they would have cautions you not to use too many words. For example your first line, I believe all you would have needed was "a sense of restraint" and left out the captivity. And they would always tell me that I must be true to my voice, and i believe that you have been. I do like it, sounds like my musings. Keep up the great work.

[Sharona Dante`]

Thank you very much for the review Carlana :) it was a constructive comment. I ll work on it !

[Carlana J.]

Thanks. I hope my comments were helpful to your writing style. I reread your poem and stand by the wordiness of it. I think that you have a wonderful voice and I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Rose of Gondor]

Great word choices, and if it was a dress sewn all together I would say I couldn't see the seams. Wonderful, beautiful. And sad too. :) I look forward to reading more from you! P. S. Music and writing are basically all I live for too. :)

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I really enjoyed this write, like the emotions through out.
You did a wonderful job here.