Remembering Lost Love...Sometimes

We’re falling

Little grey particles sliding from grace

Floating sporadically through smog filled space

Only to land

In perfect place…

Sometimes

 

You’re falling

A tortured soul disguising your hate

Lying dying knowing too much too late

Groping with hands

In tearful wait…

Sometimes

 

I’m falling

Matching lost memories piece by piece

Building what’s broken to take one more peek

Remembering old hurt

Too numb to speak …

Sometimes

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

Excellent write, Sharleen. I love the repetition of "sometimes" because sometimes we do have moments of forgetfullness of the past.. the hurt.. the pain. Amazing though how just one moment, a song.. a voice.. a familiar place, can take us back to those memories. This is very well written, great stanza breaks, wonderfully chosen words.. the first two lines drew me in immediately and I knew I just has to read this poem. Great job!

[Moflo]

This had an amazing flow and your rhymes were spot on. Very nice write, nice wording and great rhythm. Great job.