In honor of the squigilly line,hidden in my eye.

In honor of the squigilly line,hidden in my eye.

A Poem by Derek
"

its weird

"

Why, dear squigilly line....

why do you hide from the center of my eye?

Why oh why?

When I look to the corner,a squigilly line be what I see.

The more I try,try,try...you seem to cower from the center of my eye.

I say once more...

Why,dear squigilly line.

© 2010 Derek


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Nicely done. Very amusing. I love it when people parody an ode. Definitely enjoyed this poem and it's simplicity! The fact that you didn't put a space after any of the commas annoyed me though, but that's basically because I'm a grammar Nazi.

But I did enjoy the poem despite the small grammatical errors. Very good job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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It's genius. I never would have thought of it.hee hee

Posted 14 Years Ago


Nicely done. Very amusing. I love it when people parody an ode. Definitely enjoyed this poem and it's simplicity! The fact that you didn't put a space after any of the commas annoyed me though, but that's basically because I'm a grammar Nazi.

But I did enjoy the poem despite the small grammatical errors. Very good job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem made me laugh! I love it! ;p

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lol cute poem. i like it

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Technically speaking, these are concentrations of protein that optometrists call "floaters."

Like you, I prefer squigilly line.

This is a nice playful poem about a common experience, that most people are silent about.

Good work

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i don't know if this is supposed to have a deeper meaning, but i like it!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Derek

Nagasaki, Japan



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