My precious defective

There's Ash on my lashes and
my trusts lined with dust,
this well oiled machine
is starting to rust

Mind, body, spirit
from birth
conditioned and controlled,
will we ever learn
to break free of this pre cast mould?
 
Sometimes reduced to beasts
only capable of violence,
we leave in our wake nothing but
before life after death silence
 
Obviously inevitable
painfully predictable
our human nature seems
unavoidably inescapable

Reviews

[THE LOST ROSE]

Yes you have simply summed up life. I enjoy this piece standing "O"

[*** Hey Jude***]

Very easy to relate to as we all have simular feelings. Sad peeps don't want better for all and use some free will! Very poniant piece. Nice work ~ Jude :-)

[Richelleau]

brilliantly written
I think jsut about anyone would be able to relate to this
Truly excellent piece :)

Particularly love the war sort of metaphore that is infused.

[Butterflymom]

I love this piece! It is creative, original and very well done.

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Great flow and content! I especially loved the last stanza!
Good write....

[Tallulah]

This amazing. i love the message it hold and the flow is great.