An ugly sunset

like a rainbow
you disappeared right before my eyes when I got too close
taking it so personally that I didn’t want to live in this cliché
but I’m not ignoring you I swear
I’m far too busy being ignorant
and now you've witnessed a disappointing miracle
carrying everyone else's baggage
like some self appointed atlas
did you honestly expect different results
making a perfect stranger your confidant?
your rude awakening politely roused me from my own slumber
so I'll be crying at your funeral tonight
remembering the time you asked :
ever gone everywhere?

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[THE LOST ROSE]

your rude awakening politely roused me from my own slumber
so I'll be crying at your funeral tonight
remembering the time you asked :
ever gone everywhere?

I could search as deep as my soul will go and I couldn't come up with lines like this. I love how a story was told completly with so few words. Nice Powerful. Thanks for sharing.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I like it.
Great Job

[MissLexy]

Love it!

[Sarah B.]

the opening line is great~