Chris the Bum

There you are.

Sleeping in the bushes behind the cemetery on Santa Monica Boulevard.

Life is hard. 

Your refrigerator box needs mending.

Maybe a shave and a hair cut 

will mix better signals gotta,

gotta get some booze in the system it's

almost two. 

What's your name?

here's mine.

 -time- 

is of the essence, Chris.

how's your history

what's your story

you're boring?

that's okay

there's dick to do, we've got all day

i'll buy you shoes.

and by the way i dig your dumpster dance, 

the hustle is priceless. 

there's that smile!

it's me.

yeah.

that's right.

we've been locking eyes for over a week 

now

here's five dollars.

I don't care what you do with this.

but if you'll tell me why,

i'll make that five a ten 

-my friend.

so tell me...

really.

and for eight years now.

well that isn't interesting at all.

why don't you just get a job?

"This is my f*****g job you f*****g c**k sucker!!!"

well said.

here's that five take care.

© jnw

Reviews

[Tai Chi Italy]

lol highly provocative poem about life on the streets and judging our fellow man/woman from our lofty position of solvency! Well written although the 3rd from last line may put some readers off, so I would advise a warning

[luciddreamer]

Very different and interesting :)

[CLUTZ]

Amusing, I like it.

[MandaBear]

interesting. The form and structure plays right into the dialog & message. Love it!!!!

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[MJ Durston]

Well - I enjoyed the poem for the most part. The formatting however was extremely distracting and kind of threw me off a lot. I'd advise a less bold format, be simple in formatting and structure. Wouldn't want to lose your audience in the formatting you want to lose them in your words.

cheers,
M.

[Aria]

well, well. interesting. not my usual cup of tea but the perspective is good and the format a little wavey, which fits with the theme of time of your piece. good work.

[Jaeda]

I've always wondered what would happen if I stopped to talk to a homeless guy. I like this outcome better than some heartwarming "Christmas shoes" story. The point of view you used was really interesting to read.

[Eshe' Allen]

lol... I'd've given him ten. Stream of consciousness from multiple points of view. And held your fluidity. Very nice.

[Lucy Joan]

The structure of this poem is so intriguing. I've never seen someone write in this format before, and the words were so precisely chosen and so simple, but it really got me thinking. :D
Forgive me, I'm not new to poetry but I have to say, this was very well thought out.