sun kissed visions

While breathing 
bits of sentences 
in and out and all 
night long...

  You killed my slumber dead you 
  slapped me 
  with your sweet 
   haiku.

     from clouds of color
     sun kissed visions fell through sky
     to be swallowed hot


                   

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© jnw

Reviews

[Norma M Sutton]

Interesting.

[biib]

Oh wow. I'm completely impressed by this. my mouth was at a gap and now I am searching for the correct words.

beautiful.

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One of my favorites.

[Angela Mulley]

I love the imagery, this is a beautiful write.

[Judy Ponceby]

excellent! :)

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Word choice here is excellent!

[J.P. Bristow]

Oh my this was lovely....and haven't we all been there!!!! Great write!

[Ravyne Hawke]

I love this.. sounds like when my randy muses awaken me to give me snippets of a story or a poem. I love the lines "You killed my slumber dead" and the entire last stanza, which I take is the haiku you were awakened for. Excellent write and a new favorite of mine :)

[RM Americano]

Is this about a waking dream?