sun kissed visions

While breathing 
bits of sentences 
in and out and all 
night long...

  You killed my slumber dead you 
  slapped me 
  with your sweet 
   haiku.

     from clouds of color
     sun kissed visions fell through sky
     to be swallowed hot


                   

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© jnw

Reviews

[writing_for_you]

Great Imagery

[wordfairy]

I love the first line about breathing sentences. And 'slapped me with your sweet haiku' is really unexpected and good.

[Broken Branches]

Well done Jesse. You use your words in an imaginative way. Nice haiku to end it on as well. I like.

[AlieahRose]

THIS IS SO SWEET..
YET INTENSE AT THE SAME TIME...
VERY NICE PIECE...

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The pillow talk
The pleasure
The Haiku crescendo
And ... the well done my friend - excellent composition!

Phillip

[MandaBear]

Short, but sweet! I liked this!

[Michael Lopez]

This is pretty sweet...i dont comment much. But this i like.. Keep it up.

[CLUTZ]

original, and very blunt.....i like it. It could be better but overall its pretty good.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

from bits of matter we will call your words you have created a masterpiece. Love this one!

[floarealbastra10]

beautiful